When Memory Lingers

poetry

The memory lingers of you
What we had and what we lost
 The pain still fresh, a linger of bitterness
 I wonder if turning back fate would have been better
 If we had never met would i still smile
 Memories like smoke going far and away
Wanting yet hating you in equal terms
 Remembering what we had in the beginning
 A smile flickering ever briefly
 Darkness descending as i remember why it ended
The sour taste of your lies staining my life
Thoughts of you bringing tears of longing and tears of anger
Wanting it all to go away, yet clinging to it tightly
Will it ever end, do i want it too?
 I miss you, never come back again
 Will it ever end

 

Author's Note

all reviews welcome. (have to clarify lol) this was written from a friends perspective when she was going through a tough time. i'm still happily insanely, madly in love with my gf :)

Reviews

[Prose-full]

"Wanting yet hating you in equal terms
Remembering what we had in the beginning
A smile flickering ever briefly"-----this is so nice......i love this whole poem;i feel this inside though
breaking up with a love of 2yrs...this hits home for me

"Wanting it all to go away, yet clinging to it tightly
Will it ever end, do i want it too?
I miss you, never come back again"-----brilliant

you are an amazing poet/writer....

and thanks for the review of "you make it a sin to heal"

[Christina-Marie]

Thoughts of you bringing tears of longing and tears of anger
Wanting it all to go away, yet clinging to it tightly
Will it ever end, do i want it too?
I miss you, never come back again
Will it ever end


Another great ending to a perfect poem. You and my boyfriend
can always end poems with such feeling and great flow. My writings
never seem to come together at the end.. well not like I would
like them too. You two have to teach me.. haha I put a lot of thought
and feelings into my poetry.. but I think towards the end I must lose
sight of what Im writing about and seem to be at a loss for words.
Whats the secret?

[Nely Amorim]

truly heart rending.. that pain of lost love and failings, loss of trust ... is not easy to overcome. well written indeed :)

[Jessica Benfield]

once again, another amazing piece... the pain of your words are expressed strongly and beautifully. amazing work...
smiles,
jess