Reality of the Consequences

When the insanity sets in.

All you feel is the shaking and trembling begin.

Not the end is near just the beginning to fear.

For no hope found, laying around.

Hour by hour time flies by, as you switch from watching the clock then to just staring at the sky.

Confined in your mind is just you and what you hide

The truth in your mind to whats just outside

Believing the acts played and not whats reality

Coming around to sense and feel to realize the fatality

Of the actions you completed over the years

Were they really worth all of these tears?

What comes out now is just because of consequence

From those little things you planned and just to feel the sense

Of amazement, of astonishment, of just being able to accomplish it

This wasn't it, what you wanted that is, the end product..just didn't seem to fit.

Reviews

[stephen dillon]

nice write

[Danielle]

Very much enjoyed this! It spoke to me on a personal level. Nice work!

[rhoades]

I'm typically not much for rhyming in poetry, but in this piece you really used it well--not to distract the reader, but to enhance the image and meaning.
I like it.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

This was a wonderful write. It had an ethereal dream quality to it tinged with dark regret. Great to read.

[KeeD]

This is my kind of poetry. Realistic yet imaginative, dark yet reflective.
Great write, had good flow and you have excellent timing in rhyme.
If you have more work like this, please upload it and i'd love to read. Favorited.

[Coyote Poetry]

"The truth in your mind to whats just outside
Believing the acts played and not whats reality
Coming around to sense and feel to realize the fatality
Of the actions you completed over the years"
I believe every action had it consequences. People who leave thing un-finish. One day will want a ending. I like the strong ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[EMMIE]

I love, love, love dark poetry. This is dark, but beautiful, great concept very creative

[Lewis Davis-Norman]

This is all really good, especially the ending, that really stands out to me. A deep, thoughtful write Alastor, keep up the good work!

[Rob Santana]

What comes out now is just because of consequence,That stanza stood out the most for me. Really good/clever wording. All in all good write Alastor.