This poem was very powerful, in fact it was overpowering (in the good way). I interpret it as two lovers finding each other, they truly want to love one another, but they have a void, or something missing, that they pettily fill with the others presence. It's never enough for them, and the void of anguish tells them that they don't love each other because they only yearn for the presence of the other and not the others void to fill. That made them alone with their burden, but together... so to speak. It's very powerful not to mention well-written, and I would like to know what you intended for this while writing it. :)
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
Thank you so much for reviewing. You're so correct in your interpretation.
I believe we can feel when something's not right. As though we are trying to fit a round peg in a square hole. We have someone, but something's missing and we know it.
This is a perfect example of that told in a great poetic way. The tone and mood are just right in this.
this is amazing! this gets me so personally because it relates so much with me and others. it's a very emotional piece and i am left almost speechless after reading
Love the detail. You made me imagine it as I read it as if I was a voyeur in a couples intimate moment. Wonderful job and thank you so much for sharing.
This is so good! The romantic, sweet emotions all came by! I felt that the boy didn't love the girl in the beginning, but as time flew by, he started to develop love for her and they became together I felt :)
Keep it up!
Well done
This is a very complex poem, i liked that about it. You used repetition throughout and i thought that you used that well. I liked the part that said as fragile as a rose, i really liked that imagery, especially because both flowers and people can be bruised but they can still be beautiful.
Posted 7 Years Ago
7 Years Ago
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