Sweet Surrender

Some guys keep women at armslength - afraid to be vulnerable... this is a love invite! This poem is now a song and can be heard here: www.soundcloud.com/veronicalook

Showcase mantelpiece on display.

Take her out, look at her pretty face.

The thoughts in her head confuse you, so you keep her at armslength

Her wide eyes amuse you, so you keep her under glass

 

You are aware

The power possessed

You’re caught in her ocean of wonder

 

It’s like she’s put a spell on you

It’s like she’s rid your fear

It’s a mystery

It’s a wonder

 

The truth has caught up with you, at last

Your tender heart is beating fast

So why not just give in and be exposed to love

Let her crashing waves beat down on your shore

 

This is your chance

This is your time

Swim in her ocean of wonder

 

Reviews

[BL]

This made sense and I love your use of the abstract. I enjoyed reading this very much. Maybe it works both ways around?

[Alani]

Thanks Bluely :) This was written from experience... but as it resonates with you so well, then it definitely works both ways, for sure!!

[BL]

It sounded very real, I could tell that. It definitely worked

[Alani]

It's a song now, if you'd like to hear it?
www.soundcloud.com/veronicalook

[BL]

I'll take a look, thank you

[willweb]

I loved this poem today. Embrace love don't fear it...even if you are rejected, you will never know if you don't try. Very good.

[Alani]

Thank you so much :) I love that you loved it today!!
It's my first love poem ever and it's my favourite piece I've written.

[willweb]

It is beautiful, a wonderful first love poem.