Fields Of Sleep

The winds come to me from the fields of sleep
Where dreams are blown out of the shallow hills
And I, in my solitude, do rejoice
As I take my comfort within their voice
Which visits me as the cool evening stills
And is rinsed by raindrops that mildly weep.

Gone is the rainbow and tincture of day
Lost in the clouds as they swim in the air
And I, in my quietness, drift afar
By merely the light of a silver'd star
Where only the souls of the sleeping dare
Seek a place that is distant - far away.

In the deepest of night, the dead of dark,
When the silent shadows hide from the light
For, shadows are secrets mellowed by age
And, ages are timeless, robbed of their rage,
And rage is bewildered, lost in the night
Yet, still sighs its echo deafingly stark.

Where is the morning to dazzle and glow ?
Where are the sunbeams to fever the heart ?
Yes! morning will come, as sure as the winds,
When the grey of the dusk slowly rescinds
And the fields of sleep will fleetly depart
And the dreams of the hills aimlessly go.

Reviews

[W. Barrett Munn]

Really well done - the end-rhymes flowed naturally and I found none forced nor the syntax twisted into end-rhyme pretzels.

[Alan S Jeeves]

Hi W. Thanks for your review. I was so pleased to receive those wonderful words. Kind regards, Alan

[jacob erin-cilberto]

great personification, the winds do speak..the shadows do hide,
I like the use of fever as an infinitive...
Like Chris, I ,too, really enjoyed the vocabulary.....except for one word she really liked and I don't--that is "tincture" but only because it reminds me of being a little kid and getting a cut...and my mom or dad would but tincture of merthiolade on the wound, and damn that stung worse than the cut.
but yes, Reading you is a joy.
j.

[Alan S Jeeves]

Hey Jacob, good to hear from you. I am so pleased that you enjoyed 'most' of 'Fields of Sleep' and saw fit to pour your praise on the piece. I appreciate it very much. I can assure you I gave the word tincture much thought and intended it as sense 2 and not sense 1. I am confident that your mom and dad looked after you perfectly back then for you have, since, clearly flourished. To say "Reading you is a joy" is certainly a fine compliment to receive and I thank you so much. Kind regards, Alan

[Temperance]

This is lovely. You take us from the evening into the dark of night then, into the waking morning. Interesting rhyme scheme. I haven't seen many poems with this scheme. I'm so glad I took the time to read this. Thank you! Temp

[Alan S Jeeves]

Hello Temperance. First of all I thank you for taking the time to read 'Fields of Sleep'. The rhyming scheme can be quite challenging but rewarding. Syllable count is important here I think. I am very pleased that you enjoyed. Kind regards, Alan

[Cherrie Palmer]

I love this. Your words echo and coo and delight the heart.

[Alan S Jeeves]

Thanks for your wonderful review Cherrie. I was so pleased to switch on and find it waiting for me this morning. Kind regards, Alan

[Chris Shaw]

Very much enjoyed Alan, particularly the interesting rhyme scheme and some of my favourite poetic words like rinsed, tincture, mellowed. As an insomniac Fields of Sleep certainly appeals. So finely crafted and appreciated by this reader.

Chris

[Alan S Jeeves]

abccba is one of my favourite rhyming schemes Chris. One can get a lot into each stanza using it. In terms of rhyming, the stanza gets carried away in the centre then ends up back where it started - not unlike my life!
As for words - words are judged by the company they keep.
I am pleased you called to brighten my day

Kind Regards, Alan

[Chris Shaw]

I like the idea of abccba Alan. It works well.