the trail

nothing at all. just...blabbering

there is a place.

there are many places.

 

which beauty is the word you use when first viewd.

than while you venture further. you find yourself

lost

for words.

 

it is big

and full

and warm

and bright.

 

and i truely cannot explain that which i am

overcome with

 

because though this place hasnt been ever touched

or seen

or smelt

or heard

or tasted

 

they have been felt.

 

far away

felt from

and lived from

our breath.

 

 

 

and we

not all

but vile men

 

look only to profit from that which we

were born to live one with all with.

 

 

hugging it

and treating it as though we were

slaves to it

 

no that isnt right.

 

 

but making it so we cannot breath

what we were meant to

mend with.

 

is evil.

 

and it carries my heart low

and makes my sadness something i cannot endure.

 

 

 

i wish only to live

without grime and dust.

 

but with light.

Reviews

[Eternally Elemental]

A really expressive piece. The wishing of better times and a better world. Even though it was a blabber, it made an impression and the sentiments behind the words cannot be hidden. Beautiful flow and very calming ending.

This is really great.

[emmajoy]

Oh my .. another style for you and so finely executed, Alan. You seem to be exploring thoughts and styles.. and that's great.

As to the theme .. how i agree with you. There's nothing better to be somewhere where the air smells fresh and the stream runs clear ..

Please write more like this ..

[ransom]

"but making it so we cannot breathe
what we were meant to
mend with

is evil"

these are my favorite lines. and there is a wonderful flow of meaning in this entire piece. i am adding it to my favorites! with light, indeed!

[funeralmoon]

nice job this one is a favorite of mine. nice write

[Coyote Poetry]

Poem is amazing. Led me with strong and powerful line to the perfect ending. I wish only to live without grime and dust. That is a good statement. A excellent poem.
Coyote