Gone

Dazed by shock and disbelief

Hands are cold, body is numb, still in a daze - because you're gone
Vision is blurred, heart is pounding, sound of silence - you're really gone
Throat is tight, mouth is dry, in a state of shock - you're already gone 

We are left behind, wondering why and stumbling 
We're here asking how and fumbling 
Never to see you again and crumbling 
You're now long gone and moved on
to the land where travellers never return.

So death, you have struck again
Your icy claws have inflicted pain
Dark shadows have swallowed one so young
Cut off even in the blossoms of his promise
Scored by death -swallowed by eternity
This has to be a mystery
The mystery of death - the misery of loss
It's in the heart of the mother
It's in the eye of a father
It's in the cry of a sister 
It's in the sigh of a brother 

A mother's dream 
Is now a chilling scream
A father's pride 
now a pain he cannot hide
Whether a saint or a sinner
Whether a loser or a winner
No youth deserves this kind of flight
With death as his pilot

Reviews

[barleygirl]

WOW! I started out thinking this was about a person who willingly left another . . . but the poem just keeps revealing more & more, along the way, that shows how sad this situation is . . . gone by sudden death . . . then we find out it's a child . . . what could be worse than losing a child to death? This is one of those rare times when I feel a poem is really conveying the gut-wrenching sorrow that this must be like for a person . . . the first stanza really SHOWS us how the loss is like physical torture. Your various repetitions & rhymes do much to create a wailing effect & we can feel the painful experience intensely thru your words. Excellent job!

[Anima Akuffo]

Thank you barleygirl.

[Silent_Dreamer]

This is amazing. It's raw and to the point. Honest and emotional. I love it. It touches home.

[Anima Akuffo]

Thank you Silent_dreamer

[Anima Akuffo]

Still mourning the loss of my best friend...like being blown a thousand kisses and then broken into a million pieces...

Thanks for reading my raw feelings. Let me know what you think.