Numb

When we fall, we need lot of courage to stand up.. this poem shows the pain inside us...

 
         Huge scream

      Heavy noise

      High tension

      Large Illusion

      Long pain

      Little darkness

     Afraid to lose

     Taking risks

     Lot of Expectations

 

     Why I am afraid

     I don't know, I can't see

     I am my worst enemy

 

     You look around and all you see is hurt

     And I am the one who can't be saved

     Hiding myself behind the caves

     People asking me questions

     and I have nothing to enunciate

     Life is too short ,

     Lot of decisions to make

     Good things come to those who wait

     I am running out of space

     I stayed where my last step left me

     Maybe I am the one to blame

       Maybe we are all same...

 

Author's Note

Read it tell me what you think about it...
I have written a poem after a long time..
I hope you will like it:)

Reviews

[Frieda P]

This poem makes a lot of noise, and raises many questions....we are all one in the same, it takes courage to wake up in the morning and look at ourselves, just to breathe each day can be a challenge. I think you've connected the dots with this one! Nice....

[Akshat♥]

Thank you:)

[stars are far]

This was AWSOME =)
I loved it and really i missed your poems over here man ..
Keep that coming up here ;)

[AK]

Awesome poem! Loved the way you write it! Keep writing!

[Katseye]

Very nice work. I hate being at that point where you wonder if it's even worth trying again. But if you don't try nothing can improve, only stagnate.

[manifesto]

I loved the line "I am my worst enemy.' I can feel the emotion coursing through these words, and I think you have captured that feeling of pain and failing strength really well. Keep it up! :)

[Roy]

Evokes the visual of a man trapped in four walls which are closing in on him: slowly but steadily. Lovely work. Punctuation, I feel though, would add a lot more to the effect.

They say we are what our dreams are made of. But then our dreams are made of what we see around us.
Hence we are all the same.

Cheers!

[lei]

i like the fast-pace of this.. very creative

[Mauricio Montoya]

to me its like being under pressure to finish something everybody else wants yet time is of the essence that should never be rushed, but the ending left me with, well we’re all in a hurry to get nothing done. Nice work

[Shy Girl]

An intense work...I could feel your emotions well.
Very nice piece to make
Nice to have you back again :)

[Norma M Sutton]

It is interesting. It feels like it speeds up as it goes along.

[Brittni]

I agree with Amanda, a poem is made or broken by the amount of emotion a writer puts behind his or her own words. In this case, your poem is a success. Congratulations!