Numb

When we fall, we need lot of courage to stand up.. this poem shows the pain inside us...

 
         Huge scream

      Heavy noise

      High tension

      Large Illusion

      Long pain

      Little darkness

     Afraid to lose

     Taking risks

     Lot of Expectations

 

     Why I am afraid

     I don't know, I can't see

     I am my worst enemy

 

     You look around and all you see is hurt

     And I am the one who can't be saved

     Hiding myself behind the caves

     People asking me questions

     and I have nothing to enunciate

     Life is too short ,

     Lot of decisions to make

     Good things come to those who wait

     I am running out of space

     I stayed where my last step left me

     Maybe I am the one to blame

       Maybe we are all same...

 

Author's Note

Read it tell me what you think about it...
I have written a poem after a long time..
I hope you will like it:)

Reviews

[Frieda P]

This poem makes a lot of noise, and raises many questions....we are all one in the same, it takes courage to wake up in the morning and look at ourselves, just to breathe each day can be a challenge. I think you've connected the dots with this one! Nice....

[Akshat♥]

Thank you:)

[Pragati Chaudhary]

I wish I could heal you
that's just I want you to say to you!

Lovely Piece! and very true!

[Akshat♥]

We cant heal anyone if they are far away. Misunderstandings happen always. Thank you

[Jazique]

It was interesting. I had to go back and read it twice. Making me wonder what is this person going which, made me think they were paralyzed. From fear, from the noise of others, from yourself, all the many things you listed causing us to stop on our path. Plus this paralization of numbness it's something we all enounter whether we notice or not; making us all the same in one way or another. Anyways well done. The poem really grasped my attention with the coordination of words and the color scheme that went with them.

[Akshat♥]

Thank you:)

[audrie]

"and I am the one who can't be saved - hiding myself behind the caves " I like really liked this section - thanks for sharing

[Akshat♥]

Thank you:)

[nibhz]

this poem say a the story of everyone! everyone feel the pain one day or the other! perfectly depicts the confusion of emotions in our life!

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Aristede Craig Jr]

We all have the problems that scream at us issues that miuse us. Until were dust until were dust....
Just kite in the wind, just sail in the ocean... Just breathe... And take it easy... Tis love is all

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)

[Ian Faraway]

Something about the last few stanzas kind of put me off and I can't tell what it is. The last stanza I felt like there was just a whole bunch of different ideas being said in those four lines. But I got the meaning of the poem and the description was good. J'adore! -Ian

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Bhumi Motwani]

It's an interesting poem :)

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

I really enjoyed this one, Akshat. It is raw and emotional with a lot of great images. You speak some truths in this piece as well as give the reader questions to ponder. This poem shows that you are becoming more complex with your writing. I can appreciate that. Well done.

[Akshat♥]

thank you dear:)

[Saumya]

this is exceptionally wonderful...!!!
very very well done..!!

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Saumya]

you are highly welcomed..!!

[Inder24]

wonderful poem. I actually Liked the last 5 th stanza . We can Only get up from our huge losses when we see that who we really are .. keep writing more !

[Akshat♥]

thank U dear:)