Happy To Know You Still Care

You can't predict anything in life...

Most Beautiful music in the world is your own heartbeat.

It gives an assurance that you will survive 

even when the whole world leaves you alone...

and my heartbeat is you

Starting phase of love begins with friendship

and keeping a friend is as difficult as losing one

you sacrifice a lot to keep them.

I may not have sacrified enough for you..

but in my heart I swear am keeping you

Once I wish to have a key to your heart

now I have the heart but the key is lost forever...

We had a fight

We stop talking to each other

Days pass by

I still feel the sense of your touch

How you make me smile

Now those days are over...

We always fight about stupid things

and regret later..

We always feel sorry

and do it again

On my birthday you gave me a rose

and said goodbye..

I was so stupid to think for

one second you actually cared..

Author's Note

Review it and give your honest views...I am waiting:)

Reviews

[Jack Isaac]

It would be more inviting to know who this poem is for, but whoever it was lost a valuable friend --anyone who understands that "the most beautiful music is a heartbeat and that heartbeat is for you" would be a good friend indeed. This poem has a nice flow and is SO well written. Thanks, and excellent work!

[Diane Lockard]

Beautiful music in the world is your own heartbeat - lovely phrases, and expresses your feelings in different words... Keep on writing!

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

This is a wonderful piece, Akshat.. you used some imagery and metaphors in which opened up the poem more and allowed the reader to see what was going on. I did find one serious grammatical error.. you switched pronouns from you to her. If you start out in you, stay in you, same if you start in her... I will show you the areas:

Days pass by
I still feel the sense of her touch
How she make me smile
Now those days are over...

both "her" and "she" should be "you"

On my birthday she gave me a rose
and said goodbye..
I was so stupid to think for
one second she actually cared..

both "she"s should be you.

Other than that, this is a really great poem.

[Akshat♥]

thank you dear..i will correct my mistakes:)

[Ravyne Hawke]

good deal dear

[beautiful life]

Lovely poem :)

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)

[Pallavi Chaturvedi]

Really good piece of writing and so emotional ending too

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Your writing is so Good. Well Done! Keep Writing Friend!

Do u read mine 2 "Why?, Who is a Poet"

If possible then give your reviews..

Regards,
Lucky

[Akshat♥]

Sure! thank you :)

[Gobinder Singh Dhindsa]

Welcome

[Surbhi Khandelwal]

Once I wish to have a key to your heart
now I have the heart but the key is lost forever...
beautifully done..i like these lines :).. good job !

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Purva Pathak]

luv ya!
its awsome... :)

[Akshat♥]

Thank you purva :)
means a lot to me...

[Purva Pathak]

mah pleasurw :)

[Anuvart]

Pictures help this poem to build in a good way..
nicely written

[Akshat♥]

thank you :)

[Hitman]

Care is something that everybody wants in life from their dear ones..
Nicely written :)

[Akshat♥]

thank you :)

[AYVID N]

:) you say many things very effectively here. Makings of a great poet.
I liked - I may not have sacrified enough for you..
but in my heart I swear am keeping you
Though the poem starts and ends differently I loved the wry cynicism with which you end.
90/100 for swell poetry.

[Akshat♥]

thank you :)