Waiting is all I have

Waiting is all I have

A Poem by Akshat♥
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well waiting is never easy but when you do not have a choice.. you have to wait for it..

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Waiting is something too easy to say
quite callous to understand

Those feelings that I know you had for me
are dead
You crushed my heart like a cigarette

You said you loved me
You said you cared

But now I realized you are just a faker

So now I am left alone in your past

You left me down on a road of hatred

I am still waiting for you on my knees

I know you did not even care

I wish one day you will realize 
how easy it is to say no

When you are screwed from all sides
you only wish to be aside

Waiting is all I have
but remember you are in my thoughts

© 2013 Akshat♥


Author's Note

Akshat♥
please give honest reviews as you always do...just rate it too
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if you love it..i can judge it

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i really liked the "crushed like a cigarette" line. definitely original. i've read a lot of "crushed hearts" lines but that was a first for me. I dig this. I've been there, man. Some people get off more just by f*****g with someones head than actually loving them. It's a type of abuse that most don't recognize because most only associate abuse with violence. That's not always the case. My best advice to you is to leave this person in the past. If they don't want you now... they probably never will. A harsh reality... but you deserve someone that instantly wants you forever, that love at first sight s**t. i hope you find someone that can make you happy. this person just sounds like they're making you cry. good luck in the future. i'll check out some more of your work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


4 of 4 people found this review constructive.

Akshat♥

11 Years Ago

I will try...Thank you...means a lot to me :)



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Very well expressed, I loved it.


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I like this, except for the vulgar language. Indeed the expression is great, like waiting on your knees. Good paper, sorry for reviewing late.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Waiting can be so excruciating especially when you are waiting to heal, awesome poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this poem. Its very sad but filled with raw emotion. I can definitely relate. My favorite line was
"Waiting is all I have
but remember you are in my thoughts"
this really stuck out to me and i really love it. keep up the great work

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

sooooooooooooooooooooooo.........nice

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Those feelings that I know you had for me
are dead
You crushed my heart like a cigarette

You said you loved me
You said you cared

love that a lot, the "crused my heart like a cigarette" was a nice visual touch to go along with a great

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The imagry you use and the vocabulary with it creates some very striking and powerful scenes in this piece. To feel snuffed out at the end of a relationship is something some of us can relate to very well. I especially liked the ednig because even if we are mad at someone we cannot deny that they are in our thoughts. Brilliant and provacative write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The last two lines are absolutely amazing! they are by far my favorite. Totally brilliant.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

"Waiting is all I have
but remember you are in my thoughts"

fav lines

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Some of the line feel a bit forced to me but that could just be because you are havein g some trouble getting across how you feel. Though you do your point across. Overall I like it. It is certainly showing the fact that you think this person worht waiting for.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Akshat♥
Akshat♥

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