Some people you never expected to be like this..
they always do the things we never expected
this poem is for those people who do unexpected things
in life:)
Never expect never assume Never expect the expected
Never expect anything from anybody
Never expect the things that hurt you in return
Sometimes we search for the things that hurt us at last
Sometimes we feel unwanted
Sometimes we help others so much and
expect something in return
Sometimes we hate ourselves and love others so much
I always had a fear from you don't know why
and still I love you
I always fell like flying with birds
and still I am on earth
Probably the most powerful stanza in this poem, the comparison along with the imagery that it provides sends a clear message. But sometimes its really hard to expect the unexpected. I was told to expect the worst but hope for the best, but unfortunately that blew right up in my face for the unexpected happened, and it was far worse than what i had expected...far far worse. So as much as we would like to expect the unexpected yet not assume, its doesn't usually happen because the heart wants what the heart wants, regardless of it all...
The size of the font threw me off a bit and didn't really sit well with the tone of the poem. Other than that, honest words.
Curses.. I wrote a really long detailed comment and WC ate it.. I will just say that this is very well done with some great images and flow. The last stanza though gave me trouble.. if everyone stops, wouldn't the expected be to stop too.. so the unexpected would be to just keep moving on. Expectations create pain, disappointment and sometimes loss. Better to live without expectations so there is no suffering.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
yeah,i agree with you :)
Thank you dear :)
11 Years Ago
u wrote a long comment on WC means??
11 Years Ago
I wrote a long comment here for you and Writers Cafe stalled out on me.. the whole comment was lost
oh...please try to message me again about all that...I don't know about that :P
11 Years Ago
The main point is in my remarks about the last stanza.. the rest was just about lines I enjoyed.. re.. read moreThe main point is in my remarks about the last stanza.. the rest was just about lines I enjoyed.. really though, it was nothing major.. but it just irked me that WC took it all away.
All the world drops dead when I shut my eyes,
and all is born again when I lift my lids.
Loved those lines :). About the rest - priceless, but still can't understand, how "poems" are made in English. In Russian there are tonns of rules, like tempo, rhymes, step and other things. So, for me it's quite different to understand by now. But still, liked it, was awesome to read :D.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Well,I also don't no from when i am writing and why i am writing..
I am just writing for you a.. read moreWell,I also don't no from when i am writing and why i am writing..
I am just writing for you and for me :D
Thank you For your honest review
Your friend
Akshat
i mean write something abt the piece...wht u like abt it..wht u dislike abt it..
wht improveme.. read morei mean write something abt the piece...wht u like abt it..wht u dislike abt it..
wht improvement u think can be applied...wht kind of feelings u got from this piece..etc etc :)
11 Years Ago
if u still can't understand what i mean to say..check J.V. Stanley comment :)
11 Years Ago
no no no no that is so unfair...here I am reviewing your writings while you haven't reviewed even on.. read moreno no no no that is so unfair...here I am reviewing your writings while you haven't reviewed even one of mine :(
11 Years Ago
Happy now ?? :D
11 Years Ago
nope. That was only one X-(
11 Years Ago
check again dear :P
11 Years Ago
hmmm well still I commented on more :p
11 Years Ago
lol...kill me :P
11 Years Ago
If I don't get more reviews from you then belive me I will :)
hello(Namaste),
You can call me (or ashu),
I LOVE MYSELF...!! :-P I am methodical,practical and a great friend....!!! I never make snap decisions, preferring to weigh the pros and cons of every.. more..