Nobody to blame

I don't know what came to my mind at that time..I just wrote it see if you like it:)

         










                     Here we go
                    There we stay
                    Its not the  emotions
                    that we blame


                   Feelings of suffocation 
                   that we contain


                   We always like the others way
                   killing ourselves from inside
                   now who is to blame



                                 We confuse ourselves 
                   but in reality everything is simple

                   Sometimes we move fast
                   Sometimes we stay
                   Its just the decisions that we make

                   Life gives us so much
                   We just never consent to it

                    We always want more
                     more than others

                     We never realize it
               Somebody else doesn't even get this

Author's Note

honest reviews please...
rate it too...

Reviews

[Christina May Shanaberg]

I have had a poetic vision, unwritten for years, and you wrote it. My vision was of two men walking on a road and coming to a point where they had to choose one of three roads; one through a forest, one over a mountain, and the other along a beach. The first man chose the easy way, the beach. The other chose the mountain. The first man finished the journey, before the day was done, and sat for three days waiting for the other. When the other arrived with cuts and bruises covering him he smiled at the other man, whom wondered why he'd been so foolish. The mountain man smiled and said, "For the last three days, I lived, while you sat waiting for life to come be you on a beach!" Great write!!

[Chandrika Konwar]

U hv a awesum way wid human choices.
i really like d simplicity of the lines stressing more on the readers ability to comprehend the feel of the poem.

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)

[S]

The beauty of this piece lies in its simplicity and non superfluous words....

[Akshat♥]

thank you...means a lot to me :)

[Anuvart]

I personally like to blame myself than others..
emotional write up here :)

[Hitman]

In this cruel world we always blame others..
we never try to learn
this poem is full of emotions:)

[sudeshna]

good choice of pictures... loved it..

[AYVID N]

You could do with a little change in grammar to make it more effective. But your thoughts do not need any changing. They are great as they are. Its always us who are our own undoing....the enemy within. Great work Akshat! :)

[Akshat♥]

please suggest grammatical errors with solutions? :)

[Mary E. Green]

I enjoyed this piece. It is so true!

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Nupur]

reality of life wrapped in beautiful words...

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Amber "Victoriomantic" ..]

As usual, you show a very great wisdom. We need to accept life for what it is and not spend every second over-analysing. It's a lesson I need to learn for myself.

[Akshat♥]

You should...
nowadays trusting people is hard...lot of effort is done

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

You're very right. Although it is difficult when trust has been broken.

[Sethnicity]

I can completely Identify with the thought. I really enjoyed the cross talk style the way the lines seem to Cris-cross over each other. My only real suggestion is that a tighter meter or rhyme scheme would make the piece more cohesive. I just noted moments when the flow just seemed to stop just because the meter was elongated too much. in respect it can be written that way on purpose and made to cause the reader to pause or digest what is actually happening opposed to just having no hurdle for the reader to surmount. but that's what interpretation and word choice is all about giving the reader an appropriate terrain to navigate.