Nobody to blame

I don't know what came to my mind at that time..I just wrote it see if you like it:)

         










                     Here we go
                    There we stay
                    Its not the  emotions
                    that we blame


                   Feelings of suffocation 
                   that we contain


                   We always like the others way
                   killing ourselves from inside
                   now who is to blame



                                 We confuse ourselves 
                   but in reality everything is simple

                   Sometimes we move fast
                   Sometimes we stay
                   Its just the decisions that we make

                   Life gives us so much
                   We just never consent to it

                    We always want more
                     more than others

                     We never realize it
               Somebody else doesn't even get this

Author's Note

honest reviews please...
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Reviews

[Christina May Shanaberg]

I have had a poetic vision, unwritten for years, and you wrote it. My vision was of two men walking on a road and coming to a point where they had to choose one of three roads; one through a forest, one over a mountain, and the other along a beach. The first man chose the easy way, the beach. The other chose the mountain. The first man finished the journey, before the day was done, and sat for three days waiting for the other. When the other arrived with cuts and bruises covering him he smiled at the other man, whom wondered why he'd been so foolish. The mountain man smiled and said, "For the last three days, I lived, while you sat waiting for life to come be you on a beach!" Great write!!

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Truth....words that express how we all feel. Nice job.

[Akshat♥]

Thank you:)

[Phillitup]

Ooooo, I really like this. You submitted this to my "Best Title" contest and this is just telling you that your a finalist. I said I would leave the comment on all finalist works and then read to see how the title worked with the piece. Man, I really love this one!

-Dell

[Akshat♥]

Thank you so much..really means a lot to me :)

[nibhz]

thought provoking poem.. forces to introspect!

[Akshat♥]

Am more than glad that you understood it..thank you :)

[prachi prangya agasti]

thoughtful poem....good job...

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)

[Himani Gupta]

It's something well thought! True...

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

I really like the concept of this poem.. about no one being blamed. It is an ideological idea, unfortunately humans always need someone to blame because they are too selfish and will not admit their own fallacies. A few grammatical errors:

We always like others way (We always like the others' way)

now whom to blame (now who is to blame or now who's to blame) whom comes after a preposition.. to whom, for whom

We just never consent it (We just never consent to it)

I hope those corrections make sense to you. Really enjoyed this poem.

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)

[Frieda P]

If all else fails, blame someone else. Interesting read, love the pic, food for thought here. We always want more.

[Akshat♥]

I am glad that you liked it... Thank you dear :)

[Jon Roggie]

Interesting write. Something about the rhythm of the words. Nicely done.

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)

[smilempsn]

well.. well .. well... the pictures were added perfect to the poem..
I loved how u wrapped the words, with feelings....

[Akshat♥]

I love the way you give reviews to my poems ;)
Thank you dear :)

[smilempsn]

hmm ^-^

[beautiful life]

nice picture
Sometime we have to understand people deeply :)

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)