I Said You Said

This is just a funny conversation between two people:):)

I wanted a friend so I asked you

I already have many friends
so why taking a chance on me

I changed my mind so do you

bye..

wait I am taking a chance on you

I am not a chance by your choice

so let me change this to
your favor ..so let me introduce you as
my best friend..

so fast..

lets see can you do right justice with

my decision..

Hey are you flirting
with me..

No never..you are not
my type..

Tell me about your type..??

He must be understandable ,
loving,handsome,have a long height,a party freak,
short nice hair,respect woman,elders..

(actually laughed).. you seems so funny..

I am not..

okay..

what about you??
at-least she should be funny,
then she laughed..

then all this continues forever..

Author's Note

I think its a funny kind of thing i have written..I think
you all will like it..please review it and rate it..
I will really appreciate it:)
IN BLUE COLOR: I SAID
IN PINK COLOR: SHE SAID

Reviews

[Tom Benson]

I could see what you were aiming at but I'm a bit of a purist when it comes to dialogue ... even in poetry. If you don't mind I have a couple of things that I feel would improve this type of write.
Use one colour for one speaker and a different colour for the other.
Use quotation marks for words spoken.
To emphasise a particular word in a sentence, use italics instead of other colours.

Apart from that, I think it works.

[Light and ashes]

Interesting conversation and poem you have here. Nice :]

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Yeah got the humour, lovely write:)

[Dark Angel ~]

You didn't have to use the i said she said thing, the colors would be able to guide us after u said it the first time. Other than that, it was very good :D

[Daytonight]

Try just using the colors to be the two characters without saying who said what. You can explain it in your author's notes. But a totally good write! I loved it! Keep on penning.

[EMF]

I love this. Free flow 'badam, badam,badam'. Simple rules are going out the window and you're sparking off ideas and dialouge. Absolutley terrific. Fun and provocative. L loved every second of it.

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Colourful and an erratic flow.

[Grace Catherine C.]

Personally I think the set up is confusing

[Akshat♥]

BrynnaW. @ I cannot do that..that's why my title of poem is "I said You said"..

[BrynnaW.]

Tooooo many she said and I said. What you should do if you have to have that is instead of said used asked or pouted, hissed, grimaced. Something other than "said." Or you can even go 'Blue= boy' 'pink= girl' at the beginning or 'Me:' 'Her:' Just a tip. Anyways it was very entertaining and I really enjoyed it! Good job and keep on writing!!