I Said You Said

This is just a funny conversation between two people:):)

I wanted a friend so I asked you

I already have many friends
so why taking a chance on me

I changed my mind so do you

bye..

wait I am taking a chance on you

I am not a chance by your choice

so let me change this to
your favor ..so let me introduce you as
my best friend..

so fast..

lets see can you do right justice with

my decision..

Hey are you flirting
with me..

No never..you are not
my type..

Tell me about your type..??

He must be understandable ,
loving,handsome,have a long height,a party freak,
short nice hair,respect woman,elders..

(actually laughed).. you seems so funny..

I am not..

okay..

what about you??
at-least she should be funny,
then she laughed..

then all this continues forever..

Author's Note

I think its a funny kind of thing i have written..I think
you all will like it..please review it and rate it..
I will really appreciate it:)
IN BLUE COLOR: I SAID
IN PINK COLOR: SHE SAID

Reviews

[Tom Benson]

I could see what you were aiming at but I'm a bit of a purist when it comes to dialogue ... even in poetry. If you don't mind I have a couple of things that I feel would improve this type of write.
Use one colour for one speaker and a different colour for the other.
Use quotation marks for words spoken.
To emphasise a particular word in a sentence, use italics instead of other colours.

Apart from that, I think it works.

[snopadelic]

I like the idea behind it. Two people having one of those conversations that uisually happens when your drunk. It's very enertaining and makes you wonder what may happen.

[Priyanka Natesh]

It's nice.But I don't find it..catchy.There's a lot of "I said","she said" which isn't very great to use in poems.Good luck!Thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

Wow. Feel like a conversation of two young people with no way to go. I enjoyed the way you set-up the poem. It was entertaining to read. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[~Paedams]

well written

[unknown]

I enjoyed this....was very interesting.

[Raven Starhawk]

This almost reminds me of a conversation I had once with a friend. Still it was a good poem.

[Keevan]

This kind of confused me a bit, but interesting read. I'm just slow. :) Keep it up!

[brenda]

fun poem i loved the conversation ! nice !:)

[Hatchling]

Lovely works

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I like the unique style of comedy you brought here.
This is sweet work.