I Said You Said

This is just a funny conversation between two people:):)

I wanted a friend so I asked you

I already have many friends
so why taking a chance on me

I changed my mind so do you

bye..

wait I am taking a chance on you

I am not a chance by your choice

so let me change this to
your favor ..so let me introduce you as
my best friend..

so fast..

lets see can you do right justice with

my decision..

Hey are you flirting
with me..

No never..you are not
my type..

Tell me about your type..??

He must be understandable ,
loving,handsome,have a long height,a party freak,
short nice hair,respect woman,elders..

(actually laughed).. you seems so funny..

I am not..

okay..

what about you??
at-least she should be funny,
then she laughed..

then all this continues forever..

Author's Note

I think its a funny kind of thing i have written..I think
you all will like it..please review it and rate it..
I will really appreciate it:)
IN BLUE COLOR: I SAID
IN PINK COLOR: SHE SAID

Reviews

[Tom Benson]

I could see what you were aiming at but I'm a bit of a purist when it comes to dialogue ... even in poetry. If you don't mind I have a couple of things that I feel would improve this type of write.
Use one colour for one speaker and a different colour for the other.
Use quotation marks for words spoken.
To emphasise a particular word in a sentence, use italics instead of other colours.

Apart from that, I think it works.

[Farrah Grahm]

If I am to interpret that they end up tic and tacking for the rest of their lives in a quirky sort of relationship then this is cute. Again pay close attention to your grammar. The improper tenses and things really distract your reader.

[?]

haha, I chuckled
I said at-least she should be funny,then she laughed..
then all this continues forever..

[Jenny Baby]

I agree with Brynna
but I do like it(:

[Sunni Davis]

Very nice, lighthearted poem.

[Brad]

you were right! such a torrid game we play amongst ourselves...though much tongue in cheek...so much truth behind the game

[stars are far]

love this
great work ...keep goin :)

[deeps]

Very well written and quite the wonderful read,
I enjoyed this

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

I think the repetition of 'I said, she said' is what makes this piece innocent and like a narrative. Loved it.

[Lane-roe]

A very interesting idea-it had me drawn in from the start. It was a little bit confusing, but after I read over it a few times I understood it. Very original-well done! :)

[∂αʌ<..]

i agree with Brynna.W......but still a good poem!
one thing though; perhaps you should have just keep one standard colour for the guy and one for the gal!