I Said You Said

This is just a funny conversation between two people:):)

I wanted a friend so I asked you

I already have many friends
so why taking a chance on me

I changed my mind so do you

bye..

wait I am taking a chance on you

I am not a chance by your choice

so let me change this to
your favor ..so let me introduce you as
my best friend..

so fast..

lets see can you do right justice with

my decision..

Hey are you flirting
with me..

No never..you are not
my type..

Tell me about your type..??

He must be understandable ,
loving,handsome,have a long height,a party freak,
short nice hair,respect woman,elders..

(actually laughed).. you seems so funny..

I am not..

okay..

what about you??
at-least she should be funny,
then she laughed..

then all this continues forever..

Author's Note

I think its a funny kind of thing i have written..I think
you all will like it..please review it and rate it..
I will really appreciate it:)
IN BLUE COLOR: I SAID
IN PINK COLOR: SHE SAID

Reviews

[Tom Benson]

I could see what you were aiming at but I'm a bit of a purist when it comes to dialogue ... even in poetry. If you don't mind I have a couple of things that I feel would improve this type of write.
Use one colour for one speaker and a different colour for the other.
Use quotation marks for words spoken.
To emphasise a particular word in a sentence, use italics instead of other colours.

Apart from that, I think it works.

[Linda]

Love colors and the dialogue xxxx

[SamBug]

Wow. I liked how simple it was describing the conversation. Outstanding job

You need to reduce the 'she said' and the 'I said' stuff from this piece, it takes away your overall message. The way you formatted it is self explanatory. You should also take a closer look at this piece, there are quite a number of grammatical errors which need to be addressed. Perhaps you could get help from someone with it. Apart from the few things I have pointed out I think you have a lot of potential. Just keep working on it. :)
Hope that helped. ^.^

[StarSandwich]

:/ Awhh, its cute again. good write ;)

[anindita]

I liked the last lines the best. Overall very lighthearted and fun to read.

[joshua deathdealer]

Interesting and entertaining. Nice write.

[Just Cat]

Definitely interesting, creative, new, something I've not come across before.
Entertaining and unique, well done :)

[Lively]

I liked the end very much.

[Jazique]

Awe nice and nice it was very humorous and I loved how you color colored the words for the speaker. Your writing was creative and unique that was really entertaing. Nicely done and keep up the wonderful work.