I Said You Said

This is just a funny conversation between two people:):)

I wanted a friend so I asked you

I already have many friends
so why taking a chance on me

I changed my mind so do you

bye..

wait I am taking a chance on you

I am not a chance by your choice

so let me change this to
your favor ..so let me introduce you as
my best friend..

so fast..

lets see can you do right justice with

my decision..

Hey are you flirting
with me..

No never..you are not
my type..

Tell me about your type..??

He must be understandable ,
loving,handsome,have a long height,a party freak,
short nice hair,respect woman,elders..

(actually laughed).. you seems so funny..

I am not..

okay..

what about you??
at-least she should be funny,
then she laughed..

then all this continues forever..

Author's Note

I think its a funny kind of thing i have written..I think
you all will like it..please review it and rate it..
I will really appreciate it:)
IN BLUE COLOR: I SAID
IN PINK COLOR: SHE SAID

Reviews

[Tom Benson]

I could see what you were aiming at but I'm a bit of a purist when it comes to dialogue ... even in poetry. If you don't mind I have a couple of things that I feel would improve this type of write.
Use one colour for one speaker and a different colour for the other.
Use quotation marks for words spoken.
To emphasise a particular word in a sentence, use italics instead of other colours.

Apart from that, I think it works.

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Good..!!

[Desmund Tiny]

so cute. I love it. I like the font colors too, especially the blue

[Richard Williams]

Sure is a different and imaginative work. Unless you did this on purpose, 'have' in line two should be 'has'. Nice job with the colors.

[melissa]

This,poem is so awsome keep up the great work keep the poems and stories coming

[Calypso]

Many emotions and the color of the font adds a nice touch!

[Kenneth The Poet]

Interesting, kind of off the wall. I love the color changes with each stanza of your poem. Nice work.

[FemmeSpookyCorpse]

I really like this! You turned an awkward situation between two people into a memorable piece. All it needs is a little revision...and you'll be golden! Nice job! = ]

[Akshat♥]

can u help me with revision ? :)

[Ima]

A very light reading. Made me remember some silly times. :) Good job

[Cassiopia Summers]

It was really neat! I loved it. :)

[Katseye]

May I ask... is English a second language for you? It's just some of the wording or phasing seem to indicate that such is the case. As others have said you don't actually need all the he said, she saids. Otherwise a solid piece just needs a little polishing.