I tried

trying sometimes presents you a place where everything is just seems like a miracle:)

I tried and tried and tried again
but its not working out

Its hard but I am trying..
giving everything I have..
still haven't found the right path..

I am trying to get close to it
but still far behind

Sometimes I get under it
grab it with my both arms
still far behind

It's getting worse the more I try

I am trying to sort it out
just the idea to do it remains laggard

One thought popped out from my mind
"I will try again tomorrow"

I try to push more
To give a last try

At last I succeeded 
feeling a big relief

Sometimes trying a lot
gives you a Success
its all the patience that counts at last

Author's Note

Try to enjoy this poem..please review this honestly..
and rate it too..i will really appreciate it:)

Reviews

[Bertie]

A simple poem with a painfully clear message.
I wonder if perhaps it's slightly repetitious...I understand that that feeds into the theme of trying again and again and again...I'd love to see you express this in a different form, more concise and limiting to see how you do; you're easily a good enough writer to do it. Maybe try taking the theme of the poem and putting it into the form of a haiku or a cinquain :)
But I reiterate, a nice poem

[momo]

this is a great poem. im actually glad i read it the timing for it is perfect in my world of chaos lol great job

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Good poem. The last line brought out the message so well, patience is all one needs :)

[Lane-roe]

I love the message behind this-it's such a good one. Great work :)

[EMF]

Really interesting poem with a neat idea and summation. I did get the feeling it could be a little tighter though. Maybe a stanza shorter. There are also a couple of small typo's. Capitalise some of the 'i''. Beyond those very small points a craking read. Enjoyable with a good strong message

[∂αʌ<..]

try, try , try till you succeed!
a wonderful poem with the right message!
a great write!

[Alexis]

Ohhh nice! There was a good message in this poem! You gotta keep trying and don't give up. Persistency can be good! You have to have the will, patience (like you said!), and right thoughts in your mind and success is definitely possible. Nice work!

[snopadelic]

I like this. Tis a big thumbs up to those who try, but don't nesscarily get there but never stop trying. I like it

[Coyote Poetry]

In life people who don't give up. Will find a good place to find peace and happiness. People with no dreams or goals get lost and can't find their proper place. Thank you for a excellent poem.
Coyote

[...]

Hope-filled poem. Lovely thoughts.

[~Paedams]

I enjoyed the poem. I also can identify with it as well. Very well written.