I tried

trying sometimes presents you a place where everything is just seems like a miracle:)

I tried and tried and tried again
but its not working out

Its hard but I am trying..
giving everything I have..
still haven't found the right path..

I am trying to get close to it
but still far behind

Sometimes I get under it
grab it with my both arms
still far behind

It's getting worse the more I try

I am trying to sort it out
just the idea to do it remains laggard

One thought popped out from my mind
"I will try again tomorrow"

I try to push more
To give a last try

At last I succeeded 
feeling a big relief

Sometimes trying a lot
gives you a Success
its all the patience that counts at last

Author's Note

Try to enjoy this poem..please review this honestly..
and rate it too..i will really appreciate it:)

Reviews

[Bertie]

A simple poem with a painfully clear message.
I wonder if perhaps it's slightly repetitious...I understand that that feeds into the theme of trying again and again and again...I'd love to see you express this in a different form, more concise and limiting to see how you do; you're easily a good enough writer to do it. Maybe try taking the theme of the poem and putting it into the form of a haiku or a cinquain :)
But I reiterate, a nice poem

[Akshat♥]

Thank you everyone for your corrections and lovely reviews:)

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

nicely written, and with a beautiful message that is so true... really great job on this write, i enjoyed this :)

[Cassiopia Summers]

Its a good idea. :) Has good flow as well. Great write.

[Yina]

Sometimes trying a lot
gives you a success
its all the patience that counts at last

So very true!! Makes me realize how little patience I sometimes have an I'm gonna really try to change that. Thanks for the eye opener!:)

[Katseye]

Pretty good. It may help to find someone to proof read for you. All in all, a good write you get your message across well.

[joshua deathdealer]

Clear and to the point. Enjoyed it.

[SamBug]

Wow. Your message was so clear and so painful.
I really enjoyed reading this one.

[Ry]

I think this is a really good concept, but it would be even better as a poem if you took out the ambiguity of what "it" is. What exactly is being chased?
=) -Eli

[anindita]

Well written. Patience does pay in the end.

[Just Cat]

Interesting, simple and encouraging piece.
Apart from the repetition, I do like this piece. I understand that you're trying to get the message across of trying and trying and trying, but maybe another way would be a bit more... specific.
It's just a suggestion. As I said, I do like this piece, it's very encouraging and I will definitely keep your words in mind.
Well done for being an inspiration :)