I tried

trying sometimes presents you a place where everything is just seems like a miracle:)

I tried and tried and tried again
but its not working out

Its hard but I am trying..
giving everything I have..
still haven't found the right path..

I am trying to get close to it
but still far behind

Sometimes I get under it
grab it with my both arms
still far behind

It's getting worse the more I try

I am trying to sort it out
just the idea to do it remains laggard

One thought popped out from my mind
"I will try again tomorrow"

I try to push more
To give a last try

At last I succeeded 
feeling a big relief

Sometimes trying a lot
gives you a Success
its all the patience that counts at last

Author's Note

Try to enjoy this poem..please review this honestly..
and rate it too..i will really appreciate it:)

Reviews

[Bertie]

A simple poem with a painfully clear message.
I wonder if perhaps it's slightly repetitious...I understand that that feeds into the theme of trying again and again and again...I'd love to see you express this in a different form, more concise and limiting to see how you do; you're easily a good enough writer to do it. Maybe try taking the theme of the poem and putting it into the form of a haiku or a cinquain :)
But I reiterate, a nice poem

[Alexa Tasch]

Really nice poem with a simple but powerful message. Never give up. Very inspiring. Great job!! :)

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Amber "Victoriomantic" ..]

I'm so glad that you found success eventually. It's very difficult when constant efforts take a very long time to pay off. I hope this gave you some catharsis, and a release from the frustration.

[Akshat♥]

you are right here :)

[Amber "Victoriomantic" Hart]

Ah, good :)

[Ian Faraway]

A few word mix ups like 'as i more try" just doesn't make sense at all as 'more try'... anyways other than those small mistakes, I loved it!

[kaylynnmelody♥]

great piece of writing.

[Inyourshadow]

We must always strife to move forward and never let ourselves give in and think well maybe tomorrow for tomorrow never comes. beautiful poem with an honest message, one to be heard. Keep em' coming

[jhumur]

wow akshat!! d last line particularly is very pretty!!!

[Dayran]

In the West, its Siva the Deva, in the middle-east, Devi the sakthi and in the East, its Siva the man. Knowing where you are when you are trying hard is important to the effort that you put in. It honors your work. A poem that hints at the need to try harder!

[realmwriter]

I tried too once and I gave up. Alas I will try again, and again, and again if nesacerry untill I get it right. I will continue to try! 100/100

[LiberScriptus]

I find it interesting that the theme of trying is reflected in the repetition of the word itself- as though you are trying to express yourself trying. I think it could benefit from a little editing though- interesting as the repetition is, I think it could work better if it were more concise. Would you consider giving it a formal form? I think it would be interesting as a sestina.

[Mauricio Montoya]

great job all we can do is try.