Voices

Sometimes voices disturb us or give us a path where we get involved deeply...

Voices echos in my mind
making my thoughts wild.

Voices sharpen the situation
diminishing the silence around.

Situation getting worse and

I am going crazier every second.

These voices are harder to stop
trying is also a waste of time.

These voices wants to say something
about life
about struggle
about childhood
about peer pressure
about a bright future
about responsibilities
about everything ...

These situations made me think harder

Are these things crazier
or I am believing in them.

Hard to try
Hard to find
these voices are making me blind.

Some voices making me strong
giving me experience in this
field of ignorance.

Balancing the situation between
bad and good voices,
I throw myself in this field of choices.

Wish me good luck
Wish me a bright future
these voices cannot break me apart
Since in every road there are many paths.

I will make my own voice for others
to compete and destroy these bad voices.

Author's Note

please review and rate this piece..
i will really appreciate it..

Reviews

[Becky C Strukamp]

Great poem. Those pesky voices. I like the way you structured the stanzas and used color. Our inner voice to me, Is something that our gut feels warning us or saying yes this feels right. Sometimes those voices are good you just have to be in tune and follow the positive. Love the poem.

[Ian Faraway]

"Is these things are crazier
or i am making one."
Um, what? You should revise that one because it makes next to no sense to me. Other than that, it was an alright poem. Not the best you've done but still, I can kinda see where you're coming from.

[LinBin]

I really love this piece....very strong. well done

[Mauricio Montoya]

Great job!

[Mehul Rwat]

Good work!! Keep writing..

[Yina]

Pretty interesting. Like the colors:)

[Jupiter Jazz]

People always feeling the need to voice their opinion, even if its offensive and hurtful is exactly why so many people wind up depressed or act like a tsundere. You give voice to that. Bravo

[Ripple of Aqua]

This is so great in the structure you have. It doesn't flow exactly, but that's just what gives it that little edge and character to it. And the subject itself is a character all its own.

[jayfray]

Very nice and deep poem. Voices in one head (i call them vampires) are the most vexing part of being human, but at the same time they mean we are human. Sorry i know my reviews can be cryptic. Very good job

[Vaishali..^_^]

Awww.. I like the concept.. :)
"I will make my own voice for others
to compete and destroy these bad voices."
Great work.. ^_^

[joshua deathdealer]

This is great. I always enjoy your writes. Love your signature style.