Why You Have Left

Why You Have Left

A Poem by Akshat♥
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some people left our lives after making a mark in our heart... this poem is about same person...left unsaid:(

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Some things still I want to say

You are not here anymore..

this craziness breaks me away

Not in my thoughts
Not in my words
Not in my calls
Not in my unseen messages

But still you are there
in my heart

Sometimes I want to share a lucid dream
to make you mine.

Some chances I haven't taken up yet

This mistake pays me recently

You are not here anymore..
this craziness breaks me away

Not in my thoughts
Not in my words
Not in my calls
Not in my unseen messages

But still you are there
in my dreams

I love my Dreams
since you are there in it
with no boundaries.

I love my heart
since you are there in it
with each new blood forming
each day.

I love me
since you are there in it
with each part belongs to you... 

© 2013 Akshat♥


Author's Note

Akshat♥
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i will really appreciate it:)

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Okay...I really hate to start off a review on a negative note, but I have to say this...when there are typos at the beginning of a poem (there should be a space in "somethings", and "crazyness" is spelled "craziness"), it distracts me immediately from what you're trying to say. It's difficult for a poem to really suck me in when I'm wondering if there are going to be more typos all the way through. Other than that, once I reread this, it was enjoyable! Arwa Bharmal is right that this could describe 'Inception' very well!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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Very sweet :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This is beautiful. So full of feelings :-)This is beautiful. So full of feelings :-)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Beautiful form and use of colors to portray your feelings. Well done. Keep on penning.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

A great emotional punch u have given to the reader through this tearful poem of yrs my friend! ..... love is not the name of possessing the person you love but is the name of keep loving the person till your last breath when you cannot reach out to that person ...... awesome write!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Okay...I really hate to start off a review on a negative note, but I have to say this...when there are typos at the beginning of a poem (there should be a space in "somethings", and "crazyness" is spelled "craziness"), it distracts me immediately from what you're trying to say. It's difficult for a poem to really suck me in when I'm wondering if there are going to be more typos all the way through. Other than that, once I reread this, it was enjoyable! Arwa Bharmal is right that this could describe 'Inception' very well!

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

i felt the sadness in your poem, my eyes are turning watery now since someone left me just recently...

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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Nice set up; really like the ending.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

I loved the longing and inability to let go. You can really feel the pain and loneliness of not being able to move on. The pictures were a really creative touch :)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love the creative way you worded this and added pictures and colors. I think it added a lot to the poem. I think it was very heartfelt and straight to the point, so much so that it seemed to be a blunt description of how you feel. Great job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Sincere words, a unique take in a poem that is most heartfelt. A very pleasant read.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Akshat♥
Akshat♥

New Delhi, India



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