Give Yourself A Chance

by giving yourself a chance,maybe lead to happiness... try it :)

If you show me yours

I will show you mine..

Everything is gonna be fine

la laa la la laa

ye ye heh heh hehh

You make me worried

you make me sad

If you don't say it

I will go mad

la laa la la laa

ye ye heh heh hehh

See if you can

Watch your step 

and forget the plan

You seem busy..

don't know why

Can't stop my heart from beating so fast

It feels like killing me from the rest

all apart

la laa la la laa

ye ye heh heh hehh

Cute and Funny things are going all around

Makes me happy and I will fly all round

See I like you

and I think you too

So why to wait

why to stop

give yourself a chance

You never know what will happen

Next day when we awake

and there will be no more plan..

la laa la la laa

ye heh heh hehh . . .

Author's Note

honest reviews please:)
tell me the corrections...of any type..
i will appreciate it...
rate it also:)

Reviews

[Megan]

"See if you can
Watch your step
and forget the plan"

i like this... the whole idea of letting go, and opening up your heart for a chance-an opportunity- for happiness. Often times we find ourselves wanting to, like you said, plan things, and have control over much in our life, but it doesn't always have to be complicated. Sometimes it can just be as simple as...I like you, and you like me, so let's just have fun and be...and that's the feeling I got from this poem.. so simple, and so true..

and the "la laa la la laa" and "ye heh heh hehh" was also a nice touch that just made it even better and realistic..

and i love the picture.

thanks :)

[Kes]

Aww, sweet.
I really like this. It's cute and it's so so so so so so true. Wouldn't it be nice if we could just let go and give happiness a chance. :)

[Ian Faraway]

I don't get some of it, grammatically. Like 'Why to wait, why to stop' doesn't make sense. Other than that really bizarre part, it seems like a really childish love song.

[Amanda_Rose]

the picture and the colors absolutley add to the poem. it makes it fun :) love it

[Deck_As_Heck]

honestly this sounds like a demonic chant. i'm just kidding. but seriously.


...are you secretly lady gaga?

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

this was a fun read I liked it:)

[St.Jimmy]

It is an amazing and a cute write brother
But it will look more good when you'll remove lalala and all that
It will suit only when you sing
Because when you read it ,the flow is disrupted at some stages which won't look good

Thanks
Aaradhya
x

[John Patrick Robbins AK..]

Really a fast read.
Doesnt flows well and is simple in design and that to me is a very good thing my friend to me writting is all about connecting no matter how deep a level you want to connect on

you've done well with this as to me at least it takes us back to a much younger and simple time
very well done

keep posting
cheers Gonzo

[arlery]

I like how it kept the the same pace through out.
A very sweet and uplifting poem.
Good job!

[Brook Hughes]

It sounds like a song. But it was very good. Keep writing!