Give Yourself A Chance

by giving yourself a chance,maybe lead to happiness... try it :)

If you show me yours

I will show you mine..

Everything is gonna be fine

la laa la la laa

ye ye heh heh hehh

You make me worried

you make me sad

If you don't say it

I will go mad

la laa la la laa

ye ye heh heh hehh

See if you can

Watch your step 

and forget the plan

You seem busy..

don't know why

Can't stop my heart from beating so fast

It feels like killing me from the rest

all apart

la laa la la laa

ye ye heh heh hehh

Cute and Funny things are going all around

Makes me happy and I will fly all round

See I like you

and I think you too

So why to wait

why to stop

give yourself a chance

You never know what will happen

Next day when we awake

and there will be no more plan..

la laa la la laa

ye heh heh hehh . . .

Author's Note

honest reviews please:)
tell me the corrections...of any type..
i will appreciate it...
rate it also:)

Reviews

[Megan]

"See if you can
Watch your step
and forget the plan"

i like this... the whole idea of letting go, and opening up your heart for a chance-an opportunity- for happiness. Often times we find ourselves wanting to, like you said, plan things, and have control over much in our life, but it doesn't always have to be complicated. Sometimes it can just be as simple as...I like you, and you like me, so let's just have fun and be...and that's the feeling I got from this poem.. so simple, and so true..

and the "la laa la la laa" and "ye heh heh hehh" was also a nice touch that just made it even better and realistic..

and i love the picture.

thanks :)

[GlamGirl]

This is really fun and true :)
It always hardest to believe in yourself. We always focus on the bad parts.
Great work!

[stars are far]

i really really love this a lot
really great work :)

[NeonWolves]

This made me smile and start swaying back and forth. It played like a really happy song in my head. The idea is very nice and you put it down so happily. The picture again makes a nice touch and adds the mood. Very nice.

[Awkward]

This is really cute! It made me smile and gave me a feeling like a totally mad yet sane adult with a child's mind who is far beyond their years! I hope that makes sense :)
Great Job!

[Sofea]

nice one :)

[brenda]

really good !! and sweet and cute i love this !

[ClosedEyesOpen]

I think it has a good meaning and is very unique, but you did have some errors here and there. Even with errors it was still really pretty, i always have trouble with making errors in my work so you arent the only one. I love the picture by the way and i hope you keep writing. =]

[Calypso]

How lovely

[Revolutionary]

Why to wait,
why to stop.I like the poem all but this.
Why do you wait ?
Why do you stop?Why shall we ,why should we,why do we,or just why wait
why stop

[Richard Williams]

Fun and moving and uplifting. Colorful and dynamic also.