Give Yourself A Chance

by giving yourself a chance,maybe lead to happiness... try it :)

If you show me yours

I will show you mine..

Everything is gonna be fine

la laa la la laa

ye ye heh heh hehh

You make me worried

you make me sad

If you don't say it

I will go mad

la laa la la laa

ye ye heh heh hehh

See if you can

Watch your step 

and forget the plan

You seem busy..

don't know why

Can't stop my heart from beating so fast

It feels like killing me from the rest

all apart

la laa la la laa

ye ye heh heh hehh

Cute and Funny things are going all around

Makes me happy and I will fly all round

See I like you

and I think you too

So why to wait

why to stop

give yourself a chance

You never know what will happen

Next day when we awake

and there will be no more plan..

la laa la la laa

ye heh heh hehh . . .

Author's Note

honest reviews please:)
tell me the corrections...of any type..
i will appreciate it...
rate it also:)

Reviews

[Megan]

"See if you can
Watch your step
and forget the plan"

i like this... the whole idea of letting go, and opening up your heart for a chance-an opportunity- for happiness. Often times we find ourselves wanting to, like you said, plan things, and have control over much in our life, but it doesn't always have to be complicated. Sometimes it can just be as simple as...I like you, and you like me, so let's just have fun and be...and that's the feeling I got from this poem.. so simple, and so true..

and the "la laa la la laa" and "ye heh heh hehh" was also a nice touch that just made it even better and realistic..

and i love the picture.

thanks :)

[nibhz]

you can surely be a song writer!

[Akshat♥]

hehe..thank you so much :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

Wonderful poem/song. love the lalas and the repetition of them. I like the idea of chances. good job

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear... lalas is just an experiment :P ;)

[beautiful life]

lovely write

[Akshat♥]

Thank you dear :)

[smilempsn]

well..... how easily u turned your poem into something that lingers on after its read... like a songs music... ^-^

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[smilempsn]

welcome :)

[Anuvart]

I love your writing..superb :)

[Hitman]

It is written like a song:)
Loved it...

[sudeshna]

la la la ye ehhh is the part i really liked... loved it

[melissa]

This poem is amazing hope to read more of your poems and stories

[deeps]

Don't see any thing that needds to be corrected.
Then again I wasn't really looking for that.
I look to see how the write moved me or touched me in a certain way.
Over all I loved this write. It was very good!

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Such a cute little poem. Love it :)