AMEN!!! This is a very beautiful peice!! The only thing that I might change is in the 5th stanza and the last , I would capitalize God. It's really not that big of a deal, besides it being kindof a pet peeve, I guess you can say, of mine. But it is a great peice!!
P.s. I'm the creater of a group on Writerscafe called Christian Writer's Club and I try to feature a new Christian peice once a month and I would love to feature it!!! If you're interested check it out!!! I wish I could find a way to insert a hyperlink!! I'm terrible with computers lol.
Anyway, great work!!
Its a beautiful and colourful poem!(hey that could go even literaly :-P!)I have never really considerd writing about God i dont think i would do HIM justice,but this poem does!i like it
Thats simply BEAUTIFUL! Really, I love how you made the stand in this poem and how you told us the story in this poem!
I love this poem really much, thanks for posting it here and sharing it!
Beautiful poem...even though I don't agree that 'God is one...having different names'
i respect your opinion and admire the artful way you expressed it :)
thanks for sharing!
A well-written poem of belief, and simple assertion. The concept of God remains one of entire subjection. Asserting something doesn't make it true. Some interesting lines..."He cannot be attained through silence." How could anyone know this? And what is the "He" that one seeks to attain? God means many different things to many different people, and all is by assertion. The universe is indeed knowable, but not by simple assertion, or by the useless glaze of faith; it is knowable by observation, reason and evidence. God statements are too easy, and say nothing. "And victory is God's alone." That's interesting that God would be in any type of competition, after all, if God is God, why wouldn't he win? "Thought cannot create him." You may want to study a wee bit of human history.
hello(Namaste),
You can call me (or ashu),
I LOVE MYSELF...!! :-P I am methodical,practical and a great friend....!!! I never make snap decisions, preferring to weigh the pros and cons of every.. more..