Time

you must value your time

One thing moving

tic tic 

tic tic

Taking your age away

Making you feel old

Giving you experience in each day

You get used to it

You have to wait for it

but it doesn't wait for you

It never stops for anyone

giving you enough

but still something less

You always need it more

more for each day

Some period ends with happiness

Some ends with gloominess

One thing is still moving...

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

Ooh, I got chills with that ending line. A wonderful characterization of time. I like how you started out with three line stanzas, went to two-line stanzas, adn ended with one line, in a kind of progression, the way time progressed, leaving the speaker of the poem behind. This underscored the tone, that feeling of wanting more time, but having it slip away, just like the number of lines in the stanzas dwindled away. Possibly my favorite that you have written. Well done.

[Safe&sound<3 ♫]

time. such a widely used subject in the poetic world. cliched, some might call it. but you, you take it to a new level! i love it!

[sarah]

This is amazing!

[Chelsea]

It's a really good poem. Time is something that shouldn't be taken for granted.... We should live life to it's fullest in the time we have. A strong poem :)

[♥Chloe-The-Zombi..]

its good. i can understand the message clearly. i like it :)

[TheFemininePad]

A decent poem that reads somewhat well. It feels like it needs a a little high quality work to it. I don't see any typos in the poem. My suggestion would be to go back, and reread it to yourself while playing music that reminds you of the poem. That may allow you to see within yourself how you could really power this poem.

[Geralyn Miller]

Too many people coast through life wasting precious time. waiting for tomorrow to do what they should have done years ago. Life is for living, notprocrastinating. Live a life you can be proud of and look bsck on with happiness. Be proud of your lifetime, embrace each wisely spent year, enjoy your birthdays, tumrpet your age, The only reason to fight time and its effects on your face and body is if you have wasted your life. Live honestly, love much, play hard.

[iamkim]

time... is precious! let's live life and make the most of it! we only get to travel this journey once ;)
nice one!

[Stef Outsiders]

Awesome, creative and foretelling... well done!

[Greg Skura]

I am so there! The moment is fleeting. Well Done!

[Glenn]

As I grow older, something my father told me years and years ago becomes painfully true...."the older you get, the faster time passes by"....your work here is so very true, and I love it! Well Done!