Time

you must value your time

One thing moving

tic tic 

tic tic

Taking your age away

Making you feel old

Giving you experience in each day

You get used to it

You have to wait for it

but it doesn't wait for you

It never stops for anyone

giving you enough

but still something less

You always need it more

more for each day

Some period ends with happiness

Some ends with gloominess

One thing is still moving...

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

Ooh, I got chills with that ending line. A wonderful characterization of time. I like how you started out with three line stanzas, went to two-line stanzas, adn ended with one line, in a kind of progression, the way time progressed, leaving the speaker of the poem behind. This underscored the tone, that feeling of wanting more time, but having it slip away, just like the number of lines in the stanzas dwindled away. Possibly my favorite that you have written. Well done.

[Amy Bumpas]

Yes we must value our time because we don't know when our
time is up.

[jessica Wray]

that is really good

[Brad]

oh, this one sounds like desperation on speed...i had to read this fast as if drawn to...nice job

[PaperDoll]

"one thing is still moving" you make time sound sinister, make it sound like a drug: "you always need more, more for each day". i like it. :)

[RJM]

Time waits for no man. Beautiful poem the monotony adds to the feel of time just passing by and us not being able to do s**t about it.

[trainwreck]

It made me think, as coyote mentioned. I also love the way you said tic tic instead of tick tock. Using the same sound makes it sound monotonous and yet continuously moving.

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words are true. Time should not be wasted. It will go on if we do useful or foolish things. A outstanding poem. Made me think. Should be the goal of a writer. A outstanding poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[Deviant Works]

I was just thinking about how old I am getting not that long ago. Am I where I want to be? Should be at my age? Am I just standing still, moving along with the ticking clock or am I surging ahead? I have always valued life, the time I have been blessed with. Choosing to rise to every challenge and yet there are still times when I ponder the words of this poem. This is great and caused me to think. And I love brain stormers.

[Dilan Gray]

I like this, I think you described the concept of time very well. I like your word choice especially. This was a really great poem!

[Rose Masen]

Time surely doesn't wait for any one. This was a great write. Nice job.