Time

you must value your time

One thing moving

tic tic 

tic tic

Taking your age away

Making you feel old

Giving you experience in each day

You get used to it

You have to wait for it

but it doesn't wait for you

It never stops for anyone

giving you enough

but still something less

You always need it more

more for each day

Some period ends with happiness

Some ends with gloominess

One thing is still moving...

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

Ooh, I got chills with that ending line. A wonderful characterization of time. I like how you started out with three line stanzas, went to two-line stanzas, adn ended with one line, in a kind of progression, the way time progressed, leaving the speaker of the poem behind. This underscored the tone, that feeling of wanting more time, but having it slip away, just like the number of lines in the stanzas dwindled away. Possibly my favorite that you have written. Well done.

[Marie Harrison]

So true. Death makes us so aware of this. Especially when you've lost a very important person and the world keeps spinning without them. These feelings come out vivdly. Lovely poem.

[kyrie]

A wonderful exploration of time and its relationship with all of us. Wonderful job!

[Theodore]

perfect.

[Chris38]

An excellent piece

[Where the night sky and..]

This one is very nice, simple and honest :]
I think the ending sentence leaves a great impact.

[littlelilypurplebride]

Wisdom comes from God but also learning from good and bad experinces in life pain taught good vaules being stronger from our pains from chilhood and passing that love and wisdom on to our children experince came when i was 18 & 16teen but understood love the older i got even though i know the lanuage of love just didn't trust guys lol... and that was good kept me outa trouble and yes always good to value our time beauty won't last for ever or youth but being close to god & yashua the son of god keeps that beauty and your lamp shining always. god bless lily very mature look to this poem nice work

That is a very different and a very nice write from you , much more mature than most of your other works .... I like it , nice write .

[Tommy]

You know what's so crazy about time? When we are young we wish for it fly faster, and when we get older it begins to really fly, and before we know it, time has passed us by... This is a nice write, writ in a timely manner!

Nice Job!
RLG,
Tommy

[SpokenWord]

I have an off and on again relationship with time. I value it, but I don't allow it to define me too much. Time has a way of making us rush. Loved your poem

[Ashley Myers]

time waits for no one!!!! good point to your poem!! i enjoyed reading it!