Time

you must value your time

One thing moving

tic tic 

tic tic

Taking your age away

Making you feel old

Giving you experience in each day

You get used to it

You have to wait for it

but it doesn't wait for you

It never stops for anyone

giving you enough

but still something less

You always need it more

more for each day

Some period ends with happiness

Some ends with gloominess

One thing is still moving...

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

Ooh, I got chills with that ending line. A wonderful characterization of time. I like how you started out with three line stanzas, went to two-line stanzas, adn ended with one line, in a kind of progression, the way time progressed, leaving the speaker of the poem behind. This underscored the tone, that feeling of wanting more time, but having it slip away, just like the number of lines in the stanzas dwindled away. Possibly my favorite that you have written. Well done.

[A]

Time is our biggest enemy... And unfortunately it always win! In a blink of an eye you find yourself in a new year, each year faster than the one before
Good Job :)

[HoorayForUnderdog]

And the older we get, the faster time moves! It is no fair! No fair at all! Nice poem, Akshat. I do have one editing note for you to consider: line 4 - shouldn't that be "taking your youth away" ?

[Calypso]

Time is terrible. It controls us with an iron fist. Well described.

[DalainaRenee]

I can feel the old age for sure!

[Julie Beth]

your did a good job on this it was nice :)

[Short.Nerd]

I like it! Great job :)

[SilentDreamer]

Nice job, creatively written. Last line is my favorite, makes you think and reflect back on the poem's meaning.

[~Princess~]

I love this it reminded me of my late mom and my late grandmother good job. It's so true. My mom died at 38 and my grandmother at 54 it doesn't matter what age it just takes u and keeps moving to the next one. Good job hun.

[Ginger]

This is so true. Time waits for no one. Excellent write.

[the-One-with-the-Darkne..]

reminds me of edgar allen poe's the tell tale heart