Ooh, I got chills with that ending line. A wonderful characterization of time. I like how you started out with three line stanzas, went to two-line stanzas, adn ended with one line, in a kind of progression, the way time progressed, leaving the speaker of the poem behind. This underscored the tone, that feeling of wanting more time, but having it slip away, just like the number of lines in the stanzas dwindled away. Possibly my favorite that you have written. Well done.
really very true, "TIME" .....
that tic-tic another essential element in life after heartbeat:)
the best teacher, healer,and everything that only rules all of us every time.....!!!
becomes a good friend, when supports us
becomes a good teacher, when really gives us to learn something.....
becomes the best healer to cure us from the sufferings....
and most interestingly, is never the same...!!
and everything with life's journey, but still the best, which really makes life a remarkable one if we honestly learn and respect it...!!!!
very well described...!!
an enjoyable read and write:)
This poem is so real. Every line is so very well written, and the way you've written would get anyone to think about all the time they've wasted. GREAT JOB!!!
hello(Namaste),
You can call me (or ashu),
I LOVE MYSELF...!! :-P I am methodical,practical and a great friend....!!! I never make snap decisions, preferring to weigh the pros and cons of every.. more..