You made me

one person can become your world

You cry

I cry

You happy

I happy

Your lips, my biggest weakness

Your Smile, my biggest distraction

If you need me 

I'll come running

from million miles away

Just to see you one last time

One last feeling closer to you

I won't ever hesitate to give you more

If you need something let me know

I will do everything to make you happy

to bring a smile, a sweet smile

You cry

I cry

You happy

I happy

You made me spin on my feet

You made me feel heaven in hell

You made me believe that i can live happily

You made me a person that i never was...

You are everything i had

Your one touch can do miracle

Your one effort can solve hardest problem

Without you i am nothing...

You cry

I cry

You happy

I happy

Author's Note

i write that i feel like doing it..
you decide that you like it or not...

Reviews

[Megan]

I like how the people in this poem seem to be connected, intertwined. and how the repetition of the words "you cry i cry" and "you happy i happy" seem to strengthen that. it makes me get the feeling that these people were in love in an interconnected way, and they are a part of each other, a love that can't be broken. i love the feeling this poem brings. togetherness.

[sushi]

wow!!! liked it a lot.

[Sara Mercury]

I would have put, 'you're happy, I'm happy'. This is beautiful. To be moved so by someone is a good thing. It shows a connection to them. But there is a difference between 'connection' and 'dependence.'

[Jazique]

I like it. How the you felt and the other as if you are one. To show what one means to one another. So wonderful job of expressing this love.

[.shalynn.009.]

"from million miles away" this should either be "from a million miles away" or "from millions of miles away"

"You made me feel heaven in hell" this makes me think of the line in Paradise Lost, which reads "The mind is its own place, and in itself/Can make a heaven of hell, a hell of heaven"


"You are everything i had" from the context of the poem, I assumed the speaker had the person still, so I wasn't sure if you meant "have" here or if you're implying that the speaker has lost this person.

"Your one tough can do miracle" I was really confused by what you meant here.

"Your one effort can solve hardest problem" This should be "my hardest problem" or "the hardest problems" unless you were tryng to simplify the engllish the speaker is using.

I liked the use of color in this poem to bring out the importan lines and words. I also like the three repetitions of the first two stanzas, and the simplification of the English in the second, seventh, adn eleventh lines, emphasizing both the simplicity ( and possibly innocence or naivete, since it sounded like the way a child would say it) of the love shared by the speaker and the subject. A nice poem, once again.

[poetic soul]

its nice...a very teenage mushy love poem!!!

[rielovella]

Hmmm.. I remember a song while reading this.... anyways, good poem..

[Karli]

Reminded me of a song I hear a lot.

Very adorable poem, though:) Very meaningful. Good job. :)

[Sarah McConnaughey]

"Your one tough can do miracle." Did you mean "touch" instead of "tough"?

This is a very sweet, very romantic poem.

[Alicia™]

Aww, this is so sweet! Great job. :)