Don't say goodbye

Don't say goodbye

A Poem by Akshat♥

Times running out on us.
I came back too late.
I hope to stay with you until the first snow.
So I can wear those socks that you bought me.
But I will die before that,because of you.
I know it hurts for you to be with me.
But I love you.


Look at me.

 

It is just the beginning .
It will hurt more later.
You will hurt more than me.

 

 

I wish I'd hurt for you.
Don't take me suddenly.
Give me enough time
to say goodbye.

 

 

Fool.If it hurts,scream.
Hold me and cry.
Don't try to hide it.
It hurts me so much.
I feel as if I'd die before you!
My heart.. It's broken.
Because I love you enough
for my heart to burn.
Medicine doesn't work anymore.

 

 

It is raining.
The rain can't cool down
my love for you.

 

Come on,don't follow me
into my dreams.

 

When I am with you at night
it feels as if it were day.

 

Now I believe that phrase

that you can see with eyes closed.

 

I am still waiting for that day to come...

Don't say goodbye. . .

 

 

 

 

© 2013 Akshat♥


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"Times running out on us." Should be "Time's"

"I hope to stay with you until the first snow.
So I can wear those socks that you bought me." I like these lines. Something so simple that means so much. It's the small things that mean a lot.

"Come on,don't follow me" I like the contrast within this one line.

Although this isn't my favorite poem of yours, I like it. Saying goodbye is a hard thing, and you got the heartbreak and difficulty of it across well. Good job.


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Broken relationships are always so hard to deal with.. you show all the pain and agony in this piece. This one line:

I hope to stay with you until the first snow.

tells so much about this poem.. I think it is the metaphor for the entire poem.. you want to stay, she wants to leave.. it's an icy cold conundrum. Wonderful job with this.

Posted 11 Years Ago


Akshat♥

11 Years Ago

Thank you dear :)
interesting piece

Posted 11 Years Ago


Akshat♥

11 Years Ago

Thank you dear :)
It is so sad and true:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Akshat♥

11 Years Ago

Thank you dear :)
nice:)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Akshat♥

11 Years Ago

Thank you dear :)
I love this. I love the emotion behind it. I love the power behind it. Awesome write but with a couple minor grammatical things. Overall great job!

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Akshat♥

11 Years Ago

Thank you..rate it if u have time :)
This is just lovely. I just love it.. and i swear at one part...I got a lump in my throat. x

Posted 11 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Akshat♥

11 Years Ago

O really...It happens I guess..thank you:)
It's raining.
The rain can't cool down
my love for you.

these lines are awesome. love the poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Very good poem I enjoy it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Oh this is wonderful, the entire emotion doesn't get cut anywhere. You have the perfection.
Well done!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Pure beauty! You are very talented!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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