All Alone

Without you why should I live..

Without you how should I live..

 

The nights are longer than ever..

The days are longer than ever..

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

Again in the evening i am alone

again I am remembering you

again my heart is stopping

again you are giving me pain

 

In this heart I got lot of memories of you

Without you I am all alone..

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

so many things I have thought

so many dreams I have made

so many things my heart wants

so many desires I have made

 

through my heart a lot of disasters occur

Without you I can't live or even die

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

Without you why should I live..

Without you how should I live..

 

The nights are longer than ever..

The days are longer than ever..

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

I like the three two-line stanzas that are repeated in the beginning and the end of the poem, starting it out and bringing it back to that original idea. Again, I bring up the three symbolism of doom and the two symbolism of duality, both of which again seemed to work, though not quite as well as in the last poem I read of yours.

"through my heart lot of disasters occur" I think you meant "through my heart a lot of disasters occur" This is an interesting line, very powerful and destructive, which goes with the rest of the poem. You're quite good at coming up with unique metaphors like this.

"Without you I can't live or even die" I like this idea, that the speaker is stuck in place without the ability to control any aspect of his/her life. Without the person the speaker is thinking of, he/she is stuck in time. A very interesting line.

Overall, a powerful, emotional poem. Good job.

[Saisha]

love the simplicity and the emphasis with the repetitions..

[Dilan Gray]

I really liked this. I liked how you repeated to kind of emphasize the loneliness. And I like the ".." it really helped the feeling of just drifting off, like you can't even finish a sentence without the person. And I think you made this so a lot of people can relate to it.

[sarah]

This is fantastic!

[Kelsie Eileen Stark]

I feel it needs music...but beautiful~ These emotions are felt in every heart.

[SpokenWord]

I never want to feel like this again. So this is a great poem as it makes me remember when I did feel like this and why I never want to feel this way again. :)

[Sara Mercury]

It needs music, this one - a little something on the piano, perhaps, so it would be a ballad. Cool...

Why do we pine over lost love? Are we that fearful of never finding it again?

[Calypso]

I hope you feel better soon.

[Julie Beth]

aww i loved this you did such a great job this is on of my favorites :) great job :)

[?]

Alot of emotion in this one, a plea, a cry out for the one you love.
Very nice

[Greg Skura]

Great emotion running through this poem. Well Done!