All Alone

Without you why should I live..

Without you how should I live..

 

The nights are longer than ever..

The days are longer than ever..

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

Again in the evening i am alone

again I am remembering you

again my heart is stopping

again you are giving me pain

 

In this heart I got lot of memories of you

Without you I am all alone..

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

so many things I have thought

so many dreams I have made

so many things my heart wants

so many desires I have made

 

through my heart a lot of disasters occur

Without you I can't live or even die

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

Without you why should I live..

Without you how should I live..

 

The nights are longer than ever..

The days are longer than ever..

 

please come to me

my heart is saying to you

 

Reviews

[.shalynn.009.]

I like the three two-line stanzas that are repeated in the beginning and the end of the poem, starting it out and bringing it back to that original idea. Again, I bring up the three symbolism of doom and the two symbolism of duality, both of which again seemed to work, though not quite as well as in the last poem I read of yours.

"through my heart lot of disasters occur" I think you meant "through my heart a lot of disasters occur" This is an interesting line, very powerful and destructive, which goes with the rest of the poem. You're quite good at coming up with unique metaphors like this.

"Without you I can't live or even die" I like this idea, that the speaker is stuck in place without the ability to control any aspect of his/her life. Without the person the speaker is thinking of, he/she is stuck in time. A very interesting line.

Overall, a powerful, emotional poem. Good job.

[Sarah McConnaughey]

I could actually feel the longing and yearning in every word. A great poem, and so emotional. Well done!

[♥Kaitlyn♥]

i love the emotion in it
Very good!
I loved it
It was very nicely worded..
Good job

100/100

[A]

Emotional peace, sounded like your heart is speaking... And when the heart speaks it's spontaneous, well-done.

[kyrie]

I love the closing plea that ends the poem, whic is the same that begins it. This is a wonderful write. Most times we assume that without the life-giving love that we cling to, we would die. But when death is life, then we can't even die. Well done.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Nice work!

[Marie Harrison]

Beautiful

[trainwreck]

nice job.

[jessica Wray]

really good job

[Brianna Brie]

The pleading gets to me. Great display of emotion.

[Nat.]

This is good. I like the way it flows more. The only thing is in the third to last stanza you spelled "should" wrong.