My Sweet Girl

I just wrote it after thinking about it :)

She is what I have always wanted.

 

She looks beautiful in anything

But she is not one to be vain. 

Like an adorable baby girl,

She always wants to cuddle.

 

She is the lyrics to all of my songs,

Which I want to hear all lifelong.

She loves to eat chocolate,

Something I never deny.

 

She is the heart inside of my chest,

She is the answer to my prayers,

She is the mirror of my dreams,

She brings smiles to everyone she meets.

 

She has an unforgettable face,

And a naturally shy nature.

She will bring out the best

and worse hidden inside of you.

 

She has faith in God,

But believes equally in all religion.

She has so many friends,

And loves them without measure.

 

She is all that I have ever wanted. 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Akshat♥]

Give me improvements for this piece with examples...
Thank you :)

[L.u.c.a.s.]

"She is the lyrics to my songs, Which I want to hear lifelong, She loves to eat chocolate, Which I never underestimate" brought a smile to my face thank you!!!

[Akshat♥]

Am glad that I brought smile to your face...share it with your friends and family also...
Thank you :)

[L.u.c.a.s.]

As you wish =D

[Akshat♥]

okay great :D

[MoriartyMesa]

I would ask if you had latin blood in your, b/c this screams of something known to us hotter blood folk.

[Akshat♥]

no latin blood dear...Thank you :)

[Dakshta]

aww that was actually really sweet..it was beautifuly written.. although the words didn't rhyme much but still it was amazing.. keep up the good work :)

[Akshat♥]

Help me rhyming then...Thank you :)

[Larrycall]

Beautiful is the word . Good write

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[Astro]

Beautiful way to express your love Akshat. Some of the wording is unorthodox but overall I think any reader would understand your love.

[Akshat♥]

Unorthodox? where? tell me..i will try to improve :)
Thank you :)

[Astro]

"She loves to eat chocolate
Which I never underestimate"---do you mean "For that I have no doubt"?

"She is what I ever wanted" "ever" = "always" but still works just unorthodox

"She can wait if she wants" --when describing her virtues this seems odd, do you mean to say that "She is patient".
These are the spots that to me, seemed unorthox. Still filled with beautiful sentiment though Akshat.

[Akshat♥]

Thanks for describing it to me astro...actually unorthodox seems more nicer than simple words..
read moreThanks for describing it to me astro...actually unorthodox seems more nicer than simple words..
isn't it?? :)

[B-poet]

A very sweet and sentimental poem. Great work. A fine written work of poignant eloquence. :)

[Akshat♥]

Thank you :)

[❤ Maggie ❤..]

Beautiful!!!!!:) I loved the wording, and how even without the pictures you'd be able to picture her :)

[Akshat♥]

Yeah it is different :) Thank you :)

[sudeshna]

Too sweet.. but something is missing smwhere down the line i feel

[Akshat♥]

what is missing?