You did an excellent job of blending the title and the poem together, staying focused on the positive through out. I love the ending as well.. live in the present, remain calm, stay positive.. wonderful message! I would still like to see you break out of your comfort zone and write with metaphors and show me prose instead of tell me prose. That is entirely up to you though, but I know you have the passion either way. Well done dear.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
I never tried metaphors...don't know much about it..help me if you can :)
and i don't know how.. read moreI never tried metaphors...don't know much about it..help me if you can :)
and i don't know how to show prose.. lol :D
Thank you dear :)
11 Years Ago
Let me give you a few simple examples of a metaphor:
Love is a red red rose
Death.. read moreLet me give you a few simple examples of a metaphor:
Love is a red red rose
Death is a train wreck bound to happen
Fear swallowed me whole
We all now that love is not a rose, but it is a way of explaining what love is.. showing what love is.. same with death, we know it isn't a train wreck, but death can sure feel like one.. and fear cannot swallow anything, but doesn't it feel like it does when you are in the "grips of fear" (another metaphor!). Does that help any?
This is nice. Optimism can really go a long way, and helping others should be a part of your life. I think everyone can learn from this poem. In fact, I feel just a bit more positive after reading your poem. We should keep in mind that we are not alone, and be happy with what we got.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
I am so glad that you feel more positive after reading this poem :)
Thank you dear :)
Strong and Calm, two totally different features, yet you have managed to put them together nicely through this poem. I like the way you have coloured "people" depicting that there are various types of people around us. Message is good!
Nice poem. Seems you are quite accomplished in modern poetry.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thank you shivam...means a lot to me :)
I can see your hard work :)
11 Years Ago
Hard work? :/
11 Years Ago
reading my poetry needs a brain and using your brain is hard work :D
Good message,I've been down in the dumps lately i guess everything around me, but you're right, got to be positive, like how this come together.
great job.
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Being positive is very important now a days..
Thank you my friend!
Take care :)
Tranquility comes from the inside, and not the outside. No matter what happens on the outside, it’s possible to keep a calm mind. A calm mind may then have an effect on the outside to make this a much better world to live in. The seed of happiness grows from the inside out.
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I LOVE MYSELF...!! :-P I am methodical,practical and a great friend....!!! I never make snap decisions, preferring to weigh the pros and cons of every.. more..