Eventually, they cut him with a sword from Vulcan's forge.
Expelled him with a fury
that flowed like a volcanic surge.
Locked him up like a convict in a criminals' lodge.
They slammed him with the gavel of the most high judge.
Your poem is incredibly powerful and evocative. The way that you describe the violence and injustice that the subject of your poem experiences is both moving and disturbing. Your use of vivid imagery and metaphor is particularly effective, and it helps to create a sense of urgency and intensity in the reader. I think that your poem is a testament to the power of art to help us process our emotions and connect with others.
Posted 1 Year Ago
1 Year Ago
Thanks Bhuyanshi. I appreciate the encouragement that your review gives me to continue writing. Grac.. read moreThanks Bhuyanshi. I appreciate the encouragement that your review gives me to continue writing. Gracias.
Akinlolu.
I wonder people like you lose interest in women as they age... I am sorry it is not satire, it is fact asking you, is it every man does, yea i think so you are also one among them. you didnt even find out what happened to my charges and judgement, and dont say that i took revenge, i am protecting you from her.
Cool down sir, nobody is putting you in Jail, for the sin you owe, but i have gone to that charges though innocent, who saved my innocence though black spell did their work, its God and good people around me who has better attitude, try to wakeup and design the character such that you are helpful to society., dear lady. Now the God didnt saved you,sir, its the innocent soul, with good attitude and loving heart. Hope you understand where you are running back of.
His treatment felt extreme and though not explicitly written, unfair.
The condemnation seemed full and final and he had no way of extricating himself from it.
Your words are profound and leave a powerful impact on the reader.
They could be words in a very gripping story and I'm an interested reader.
Posted 1 Year Ago
1 Year Ago
There are so many factors involved in what we call justice. Sometimes what we call circumstantial ev.. read moreThere are so many factors involved in what we call justice. Sometimes what we call circumstantial evidence hangs the innocent and acquits the guilty. Not even I can say exactly whether this guy is guilty or innocent. I saw the image of that one moment in my mind and I just had to pen it. Thanks for stopping by, Divya.
Maybe the justice system has just gotten too complex for its own good.
j.
Posted 1 Year Ago
1 Year Ago
I'm tempted to believe that justice got so polished and sophisticated that it lost its way.. Justice.. read moreI'm tempted to believe that justice got so polished and sophisticated that it lost its way.. Justice got too educated, so criminals get off the hook as long as the criminals and their know the proper legal mumbo jumbo. I rest my case. ✋
Akinlolu will not consider himself the best of writers until he becomes a hundred years old. In the meantime he strives towards becoming the best by continually writing poetic descriptions and critici.. more..