Maelstrom

Why when I kindle the lamp of my songs,
Comes swaying a graceful storm?
Dancing to the rhythm of the flickering flame,
Bewitched by the tunes of my melodies...
Little leaps from once-lonely clouds
Bearing tornadoes of happy droplets.
No stones unturned to let the spark glow
For all the seldom time I let my tears show...

Reviews

[Blogger]

You are indeed a poet. I enjoy your creations. Your control of the language is impressive. I like your opening question about the graceful storm.

[akihsna]

Oh, I try to be but that's very kind of you :) I still have to polish my writing a bit, I believe. I'm so glad you liked this piece of mine though :)
Thank you :)

[Blogger]

Keep writing! You have talent for sure.

[akihsna]

I shall. Once again, thank you. Thank you for your encouraging words. Touches me deep down :)

[Blogger]

I'm just being honest.

[raj24]

wow...its wonderful...ur words reminded me of great Tansen, i heard his words had the power to bring rain...your words just mesmerized me..rain drops covering tears...m voice of pain calling for thunderstorms..beautifully crafted..keep writing..:)

Raj

[akihsna]

Thank you so very much Raj :)

[Blogger]

Do you have a certain write of yours that you especially want reviewed?

[akihsna]

Aw I usually never ask for reviews but if you want to then any writing of mine would love to have a feedback from you :)