No Longer Human

A poem that I wrote quite a while ago. I fixed it up, changed a few words and fixed a few spelling errors. I hope you guys like this version than the first. Comments appreciated.

I’ve given up my Humanity

I’ve lost how everything feels

I no longer feel heat or cold

I can no longer feel pain,

It’s not apart of my circuitry

 

You can bash my brains in

Push me from a building

Throw me in front of a truck and watch me

Hop right back up.

 

No longer does blood flow through my veins

My lively lungs, turned to ones of iron

My stomach that once craved, no

Needed food- practically isn’t there.

 

My human vision increased beyond compare

My hearing is super sonic

The nerves that use to run through me were all right

But now I am like a super hero

 

 

My bones have been replaced with metal

The firm tissue underneath no longer there

My own beautiful skin, gives of no heat, no nothing

Just there to hold everything in within me

Tough as nails, unable to bruise

I am all most invincible

 

My brain is no longer that of a humans,

Half and half- a computer Frankenstein

I no longer have to learn the simple things.

For with a blink of an eye I have it.

A super computer

 

I miss my emotions that was apart

Of my everyday life

Love and happiness, hate, content even sadness

Are all gone, it’s like I’m dead

 

My body is hard to understand

How much pressure to apply

How to hold a simple pen, so not to break it in two

How to hug someone without hurting them…

It’s all a mystery to me.

 

I’ve given up my humanity

In fact every part that makes me….Human.

What am I now then just another machine?

Manufactured and created by humans.

Is this better than death?

Was this the alternative…..

To keeping me alive?

Author's Note

Comments and criticisms are welcome. ^^

Reviews

[Alicia Schroeder]

Awesome work

[freaknkamikaze]

This is a really great poem. I love it. Keep up the great work. ^-^

[Frantzuu]

Great piece, it expressed how sometimes we get to a point where we don't care anymore, we don't feel hurt any because we've been hurt so much. I like it a lot. Well done.

[Journey]

The first part sounded like the cheerleader from Heroes, but the last part sounded like Robocop or one of the X-men. Very interest. There always seem to be a trade-off...Even with our humanity. For example, when you see a beautiful woman that looks flawless usually her personality is jacked up and so forth. lol I will be back to check out some more of your work Sweetpea.

[ATG]

This was a cool poem. I liked the subject matter. A cyborg who regerets the change when he once enjoyed it. The poem was very well written. Good job.

[daftinklings]

How could this possibly be vampire. The guy is now a cyborg. It's nice. He regrets it. the change.

[Last Lying Look]

This was kind of neat.
It kind of reminded me of twilight... is this a vampire poem???
Great write!!!!

-Elissa :)