Obvious Yet Overlooked-By: Akeen V.

Unstoppable tomorrow arrives as today leaves.

Glorious sunshine rises as grayish light disperses.

Stars quietly flicker out, similar to candles caught in a breeze.

 

Seconds pass casually without recognition like a passing fly.

Time’s notion quickly falls irrelevant as soon as it begins.

 

Sins turns into normalness once they have been committed,

Intuiting many regret filled tears when sinners cry.

 

While in today’s devalued principles and greed filled eyes

Nothing amounts to nothing, which is implausible,

Everything is something despite its lack of importance.

 

Nothing can ever equal nothing, for nothing does not exist.

Yet our egotistical human race persists to dismiss

That all living or nonliving things are reliable

And solely accountable for the survival of our comforted

Society, where meaningful actions, transformations

Alongside earth's continuation is easily dispersed and thwarted.

 

Therefore ambitious materialism, grows ever more distorted,

Ensuring money will always be upheld to godly proportions.

Creating a massive absence for noticing earth and life’s

Most beautiful nothings that strive to halt grief’s

Worrisome hands from interacting with the devils keys

Which could unlock dooms catastrophic doors, with simple ease.

Reviews

[J.]

I really like this. Very well expressed, with great protest. Sadly true, we as human and The People of our various countries, are stuck amidst the muck and slime our leaders throw at us. And yet, we still seem to forget what is actually really important-taking things for granted, all that is in it's simplest form. Great work Akeen! And welcome to WC!

[DalainaRenee]

Wow.very powerful well choosen words for each line. Nice

[YouoweYoupay]

Very Very deep, thought provoking, and true. Thank you so much for sharing. Keep writing.

-Wella.

[A.A.Romanczuk]

Ah, sir, then it is clear that You are a philosopher at heart as well as a writer...I enjoyed this very much...like D. I loved the part about nothing

[MoonlightIce]

This is a very great poem! Very well written!

[Robin]

you have expressed great thought behind your words ~

[mamabear]

This is amazing! Congratulations. I look forward to read more of your work.

Mamabear

[SenoritaAriii<3]

The ending's amazing!

[Katherine Moure]

There is a lot of basic philosophy going on in this poem. I would familiarize yourself with the ancient Greeks. You remind me of a Heraclitus.

[roarke]

This is similar to the way I try to write prose, you do it better. When I look over my older poems, I see I've used too many words so I duplicate the piece and start throwing stuff out and rearranging other lines and stanzas. I then find all the good stuff was always there and the stuff I took out was good too, but acted as clutter to the heart of my meaning.

This prose has good emotive and intellectual flow. I wouldn't throw it out, but try it a simpler way, find the balance and center of the stanzas and start there.

Strong, complicated, moving. It's all in there.

[Weasley]

I love it