Obvious Yet Overlooked-By: Akeen V.

Unstoppable tomorrow arrives as today leaves.

Glorious sunshine rises as grayish light disperses.

Stars quietly flicker out, similar to candles caught in a breeze.

 

Seconds pass casually without recognition like a passing fly.

Time’s notion quickly falls irrelevant as soon as it begins.

 

Sins turns into normalness once they have been committed,

Intuiting many regret filled tears when sinners cry.

 

While in today’s devalued principles and greed filled eyes

Nothing amounts to nothing, which is implausible,

Everything is something despite its lack of importance.

 

Nothing can ever equal nothing, for nothing does not exist.

Yet our egotistical human race persists to dismiss

That all living or nonliving things are reliable

And solely accountable for the survival of our comforted

Society, where meaningful actions, transformations

Alongside earth's continuation is easily dispersed and thwarted.

 

Therefore ambitious materialism, grows ever more distorted,

Ensuring money will always be upheld to godly proportions.

Creating a massive absence for noticing earth and life’s

Most beautiful nothings that strive to halt grief’s

Worrisome hands from interacting with the devils keys

Which could unlock dooms catastrophic doors, with simple ease.

Reviews

[J.]

I really like this. Very well expressed, with great protest. Sadly true, we as human and The People of our various countries, are stuck amidst the muck and slime our leaders throw at us. And yet, we still seem to forget what is actually really important-taking things for granted, all that is in it's simplest form. Great work Akeen! And welcome to WC!

[Catonia06]

Wow, well put :D

[Brad]

wow! that was such a loud statement about our state of affairs...our society...and the social norm

[Tom]

Love the vocabulary. I love how you used complex words and can still keep your rhythm. Epic write.

[NCPanthersgurl]

Your writing style uses a relatively advanced vocabulary for a poet, which is refreshing because you don't lose your point behind it. The piece is expressive and easy to read. Very nice. :)

[Misty Blue Eyes]

wow this is amazing Akeen great work hun

[sarah]

i really like this good work!

[Matt]

nice rhymes. was smooth to read. easy to understand. but think about it this way if u will.
NOTHING is beautiful.

[Norma M Sutton]

This is beautifully written and contains so many truths. Well said.

[RonnieBreight]

I love this paragraph.
"While in today’s devalued principles and greed filled eyes
Nothing amounts to nothing, which is implausible,
Everything is something despite its lack of importance"
I especially love the last line, because it's very well phrased and written. And it really stands out to me because it's feels like this whole poem is a wake-up call to humanity. Great job. :).

[The Analog Kid]

Yes, I liked the beginning and ending. Very good phrasing and thought provoking words. There's a lot packed in here. I might break up the lines a bit for visual presention. Well though out write.