Sanity's Mask Broke-By:Akeen V.

Sanity's Mask Broke-By:Akeen V.

A Poem by Akeen V.

Such a strange feeling has overcome me today.
My heart pumps and beats in such a different way.
The clouds and the sun are in their same place.
If this feeling not for the day;
Then why a new look upon my face?

I awoke this morning in my normal way.
I took my walk through the normal place.
After my walk I headed home to stay.
I walked in upon a strangers face. 

Anger arose inside me in such an odd way. 
My heart pumped as if I had ran in a race. 
I went to where the stranger lay.

Then grabbed a pillow and covered his face.
He laid still in a peaceful way,
While the air from his lungs left this place.
The feeling of murder has overcome me today.

© 2010 Akeen V.


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This is really strangely written. It seems to be lacking emotion, but I still like it. It's dark...and amazing. Simple, again, and kind of odd. I don't know...it just seems to be missing something, or maybe I'm just too tired to realize the poem is perfectly fine and I should just go to bed or something. Whatever it is, I still like this poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


wow
An odd thing you have written here (but in a good way, dont fret.)
You lead us in, not thinking about murder in the least, only to end with the death of another.
How ever, it seems to lack the emotion you think one would have after taking a life, but this could have been your intention.
at the same time many questions arise: Why kill? Whats the motive? Who is the one the killer is killing?
All in all, another wonderful write. I find my self enjoying your work more, and more.-
Harmony

Posted 14 Years Ago


Very well writen. It's a wonderful dark poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


this has a very light feel that leads to a dark end, good job

Posted 14 Years Ago


Surreal and alarming, yet we all at one time or another
had these similar thoughts. Well done from a angry
perspective...

Posted 14 Years Ago


wow... gently intense and very well written. The end is not expected, and like I like them.

Posted 14 Years Ago


I like this one a lot. Reminds me of an Edgar Allen Poe poem. At first I thought this was going to be a really simple poem, but then the end surprised me and left me wanting it to go on longer. Is there any reason for the way you divided the stanzas?

Posted 14 Years Ago


interesting
brave
written with wonder
there lies many hidden things between these lines
confusion, loss for words and outlets of anger
fell upon an innocent and weak victim...


Posted 14 Years Ago


I think I like this most as it is somewhat relatable. nice write

Posted 14 Years Ago



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Added on September 21, 2010
Last Updated on October 19, 2010
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Akeen V.
Akeen V.

Atlanta , GA



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My name is Akeen V. I am a writer and poet. I am now aiming to become established in this wretched world. Hoping that my works will reign supreme and be remembered after my life has come to an abrupt .. more..

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