Loose

Put in some effort, people!

Here in my hand I have my heart
With fingers slightly apart,
Everyone sees the outside,
But they think I am trying to hide,
I allow them to pry my fingers open,
But they do not even peer in,
The information stays in the dark;
On my hands, there is barely a mark,
I offer my loosened hand to them,
But they do not think it is a gem.
"Do they think it is solid?"
I ask, looking at the loose lid,
There has to be someone willing to enter,
But will they try to reach the center?

Author's Note

Tell me what you think. I am not much for poetry, but I do try it now and then.

Reviews

[A POET WITH A MUSE]

I really like this poem, the rhyme scheme is fantastic and the message isn't lost inside them but instead carries it better. My FAV lines are the last two
"There has to be someone willing to enter,
but will they try to reach the centre?"
I believe you have talent 8D

[The Analog Kid]

Yes. Who will reach the center or your heart. Nice short write.

[EdwardBlue]

I like the images you create. I can tell you have a lot to say...

I think you worry too much. Let yourself make a mistake . This is a supportive place. Take a chance....

[Dance Or Die]

There should be a love button on here xD You should write more poetry, because you are really good with it.