CHECKMATE

There is a certain pace this should be read at. Slowly and seriously. :)

My darling, my rival, my black king and queen

I'll make my pawns haunt you 'til you let out a scream

A breath over the chess board is too risky a dare

Because not even a joyful smile can be happily shared.

We sit here off in thought about our secret plans

Only some of our chess pieces now still stand.

My horses and rooks will glare at your king

And we'll intimidate him 'til he lets out a scream.

My dark stranger, my rival, my opposite side,

Show me that fear that you always hide

Watch as your pieces fall like dominoes

Not even a pawn still on his toes.

Look at the board, but now it's too late

Scream at the Lord when I whisper

"CHECKMATE."

Author's Note

Comments will be greatly appreciated.

Reviews

[smilempsn]

Aaahh... I liked the thought..the structure.. and every bit of this piece..

Amazing write Akashi...

[Akashi]

Thank you so much.

[joshua deathdealer]

This is brilliant. I really like the structure of this poem. Well done.

[Akashi]

Thank you.

[R.A. Youngblood]

Wow! Creative, powerful, intense.. I like the flow, and the rhymes are pretty good. Nicely penned. Thanks for sharing :D

[Akashi]

Thank you very much.

[R.A. Youngblood]

You're welcome :)

[Tea]

That is so cool, I loved that piece. Nice job. :)

[Akashi]

Thank you so much.

[Tea]

Your welcome :)

[SHEEMA HUQ]

What a wonderful idea which you have carried through perfectly thoroughly to create an end result which is very creative and divinely finished, your rhyming scheme is great as well, excellent work!!

[Akashi]

Thank you so much!

[Bluefire]

Haha! This is great and suspenseful. I like the creativity here. The rhythm is almost like a song you can barely hear, a mere memory. The way it was written reminded me of the way Dean Koontz writes.
Well done!

[Akashi]

Thank you very much!

[Bluefire]

No problem. ^^

[ayosonolowo]

nice writte, weldone friend.

[Akashi]

Thank you.

[MandaBear]

Unique is a good word for this. I really liked how you used the chess pieces for this. Great job!

[Akashi]

Thank you! :)

[SyberRose]

Very creative and unique piece..Enjoyed...Rose

[Akashi]

Thank you very much.

[MFAtkinson]

its nicely written, well done!

[Akashi]

Thank you!