# SHIFTING SHADOWS

There are times when someone passes by our side and we don't feel any different about that person but that person is actually fighting a battle with self to fight the shifting shadows.....

There's a girl,

who lives in the shifting shadows.....

fighting a battle with herself and on her own!

She wears smile effortlessly on her lips every day

just as;

she hides her dark past from everyone!

and they say she's a great artist...

no doubt she must be;

'cause 

she had changed all her screams 

to pretty tattoos...

She always fights for others bravely

just as;

she had always fight off her demons!

and they say she's a great artist...

no doubt she must be;

'cause 

she had changed all her moans

to sweet laugh...

She stubbornly never trusts any compliments she gets

just as;

she would always find a reason to live!

and they say she's a great artist...

no doubt she must be;

'cause 

she being a warm-blooded animal was

the cold-blooded monster within.....

There's a girl,

who lives in the shifting shadows.....

fighting a battle with herself and on her own!

which no one knows about...........

Author's Note

There are times when someone passes by our side and we don't feel any different about that person but that person is actually fighting a battle with self to fight the shifting shadows..... I think many of you will find it relateable .....constructive reviews are welcome...... :)

Reviews

[Andrew Nelson Stewart]

You are a fine wordsmith and how all words clash and share space for each other with their own meanings like for example Line "she would always find a reason to live! shows Independence warrior of life. Yet throughout your poem is very thoughtful and felt alot of empathy for passersby never know what souls are going through only trying to live best of their abilities and responsibilities mixed with love and careful crafted yearning to survive. What doesn't kill you makes you stronger yet still in pain. It's very thought provoking and loved every word. keep writing sincerely your friend in poetry and life . ps " Sometimes one feels freer speaking to a stranger than to people one knows. Why is that? Probably because a stranger sees us the way we are, not as he or she wishes to think we are." Carlos Zafon

[anonymous_at]

sometimes what doesn't kill you, in the long run, get you earning to be murdered silently, like you being pushed off from the 9 the floor when you are standing on the brink ......so in my point of view if you ain't the sinner person out here then you don't deserve to be announced of silent torture .....yes you are right...I indeed find it more comfortable to speak my true thoughts out with a stranger but you know you while you are sharing your s**t out with a stranger you are risking your personal information ....well good enough information to be blackmailed...so u know we do want to talk to strangers because some genuine people would actually see you as flesh and bone and not as a carved puppet playing your role in a play called life with its director being GOD and production company known as the universe and you know what genuine strangers listen and help you out with not keeping track of your past and present and future .. they present their ground on what they SEE and HEAR...SO I guess that's why we prefer strangers.

[anonymous_at]

and thanks a lot for dropping by and giving out constructive review :) and I'm glad that you liked my work...

[Andrew Nelson Stewart]

Very true and also in the same vicinity of passions and opportunities to have common ground to stand with other strangers in a different reality from yours when you write. Its always advised safeguard your heart and yet let go a bit . Yes true sharing your s**t there's always something good or bad when sharing haha. Sure thing keep writing

[JayG]

• fighting a battle with herself and on her own!
Don't shout. Place the excitement in the words, not the punctuation! You have five in this, which is more than most novels have.

• who lives in the shifting shadows.....
The ellipsis is three periods in a row. Some use four if the sentence ends. But that's it.

• She wears smile effortlessly on her lips everday
Where else would she wear a smile? And, the meaning of "everyday," as in everyday clothing, is very different from that of "every day." Edit, edit, edit.

But that aside, This is an overview with no context. An unknown girl is having zn unspecified hard time for unspecified reasons, in an unspecified place.

Within the piece you call her an artist because someone else gave her pretty tattoos? Forgetting that I don't know how a scream can be rendered as a "pretty tattoo," and still have some connection to the scream. I suspect that a lot of the story you're trying to tell never made it to the page.

When writing peotryt, always remember that the reader has no context but what you give them. And since your intent for a stanza doesn't make it too the page, the reader has only what the words suggest to them, based on their background. That's wny it's best to edit from the viewpoint of a reader, one who knows only what the words suggest to them, based on their background.

It's a b***h to do that successfully, I know. But that's why they poets big bucks. 😉

[anonymous_at]

Well..to be honestly speaking your reviews are always quite helpful....thanks a lot for taking out some time to read and reflect on (practically editing 😂)...

[wordman]

i think many of us can feel at home here,loved it

[anonymous_at]

Thank you so much.....your review makes me feel as if I'm not alone fighting a way out of s**t....'cause to all with whom I have talked about it, they always find it as a lie.... :) thanks once again

[wordman]

i guess they never went through it

[Alfred Kukitz]

I'm finding you remarkable in idea, concept and writing! Bravo Women!

I hear ROAR!

regards,
al

[anonymous_at]

That's nice to hear that there are ppl out there who trust me and my work.....thanks a lot for encouraging me and taking out some time to read my poem..... :)

[Mrudula Rani]

We all live in our own realities and try not to show inner turmoils. It is not that we don't want share our lot, it is because not many understand or really care what others are going through... when they have a whole drama to enact for the public!! I think the heroine of this writing is a warrior. I hope she finds some help and understanding soon to share her burden with some one who loves her for who she is, and what she went through. You really paint a clear picture of a suffered soul. well done .

[anonymous_at]

Well, that heroin doesn't have anybody right now...and every second she dreads to have one.
But it's ok.

Thnks a lot for such a kind and encouraging review... :)

[Najam Us Saher]

I can relate to this. I loved the repitition of 'and they say she is a great artist no doubt she must be cause'
Throughout the poem your aim to make the readers feel your feelings was effectively done. I loved this poem.

[anonymous_at]

Thanks a lot for reading my poem...it feels good to see that ppl acknowledge my pain.....thanks once again..
:)

[Najam Us Saher]

You're welcome. ☺

[anonymous_at]

Hmmmm.... :)

[An owl on the moon]

This is so powerfully expressed, and such a truth we all need to realize, more each day. There are too many struggling, and yet hiding their pain. May we somehow shine light in those shadows, and not be afraid to enter them so a soul can be set free.

[anonymous_at]

Yes, you are right....since I have no one's back that's why I write poems so that other's feelings are respected...thanks a lot for taking out some time to read and review my poem... :)

[An owl on the moon]

Seems you have all of our back's here... so thank you! :)

[anonymous_at]

Ya you right....😂😂😂

[anonymous_at]

Ya you are* right.....😂😂😂

[vainvessel]

I love the imagery you give and the twists with how with art can transform pain. Grammar needs a bit of work but you definitely have talent.

[anonymous_at]

thank you so much for taking out your time to read this poem....and yeah i have been trying to reduce the number of grammatical errors that i came...... but yet i always end up making some....thanks a lot anyway,...... :)

[vainvessel]

Keep working on it and you'll get there :)

[anonymous_at]

i hope so.... but do you know any idea how can i cut down my grammatical errors ... if you have any then please do mail me....i would be greatful .... :)