#SOCIETY'S S**T !!!!

#SOCIETY'S S**T !!!!

A Poem by anonymous_at

" WE DON'T CARE TO MAKE OUR RULES
BUT WE CARE TO FOLLOW THE RULES ,
MADE BY NONE OTHER THAN SOCIETY!!!"
 
SHE wore a pencil skirt
'cause she liked it more than a suit
So, society called her S**T !!!
SHE wanted to marry a man 
who respected her and loved her 
'cause she didn't want to marry a man
whom she didn't know and doubted
So, society called her S**T !!!!
The man she loved touched her,
she didn't say anything 
but the man she didn't know touched her 
she denied and screamed
So, society called her S**T !!!
He took his time to marry 
'cause he wanted to be independent
She took her time to marry
'cause she wanted to be independent 
So, society called her S**T !!!!
THIS SOCIETY CALLED HER S**T........
SUBMISSIVELY , HER FAMILY CALLED HER S**T!!!!
IN DESPAIR , IN THOSE SCREAMS .......SHE DIED......CHANGING THIS SOCIETY
 AND TRYING TO UNDERSTAND
 THAT WHY DIDN'T HER PARENTS STOOD BY HER SIDE........

© 2017 anonymous_at


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Oh dear, you are just 16 and you have written such a strong poem on society with such a serious topic, you amaze me. It was beautifully done. Now I know age doesn't decide what to write and what not, if so called 'society' can name anyone writers have right to write about them. Very strong take on today's Indian scenario. I liked the honesty and rawness in your words.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

anonymous_at

7 Years Ago

Well thanks a lot...... It's really nice to see that there are people who agree with me.... And i t.. read more
Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

We all are people living in a society and getting judged by them. You are welcome :)
anonymous_at

7 Years Ago

Ya... You are right..... :)



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you have a huge passion. i don't know if it evolved due to something traumatic or if it is just innate within you, whatever it is, i definitely felt it. you have all the makings of a great writer.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

anonymous_at

6 Years Ago

I'm overwhelmed to hear that..... Well it's because of my unfortunate past and present....hope why u.. read more
I am always interested to find out more about the social ideas & practices in other cultures. You've drawn a stark portrait here that "SHOWS INSTEAD OF TELLS" (first rule of good writing!) I can feel the venom in your words, but there isn't any excess drama . . . you just set out the details of each scene & leave it for the reader to draw any conclusions. That's a powerful persuasive technique. When we write an opinion piece, we get a bunch of blowback. But if you just paint what you see, it's kinda hard to argue with that. You are clearly tapping into a natural talent for seeing things that matter & knowing how to express it. (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 6 Years Ago


anonymous_at

6 Years Ago

Thanks margie... For dropping by and reviewing.... It really means a lot.... And thanks for encourag.. read more
Beautifully portrait honey...It's really remarkable that someone has the courage to actually stand up against the people who try to limit us..Girls...

Posted 6 Years Ago


Thedreamer16

6 Years Ago

Sweetheart..Right now..U don't know what is your come ur way..And how well u can manage it...And whe.. read more
anonymous_at

6 Years Ago

love you to infinity and beyond mum..:)
Thedreamer16

6 Years Ago

Same baby 😘
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Gee
This is obviously how you see society's view on women striving tor independence, why ???

Posted 7 Years Ago


anonymous_at

7 Years Ago

To be honest.... I see the society in this way because it saw me in that way.... By that way i mean .. read more
Gee

7 Years Ago

Thank you for r explaining. It was my pleasure, I enjoyed the read.
anonymous_at

7 Years Ago

No problem.... :) you are welcome....
There's a lot of capital letters and exclamation points. It looks like a chant for a women's march. I understand what you're trying to show, but it takes away the emotions that the poem should have. It's very nice, just tone down the capital letters and excessive punctuation. Unless your aim is to make it look like an angry speech, then it's okay the way it is.

Posted 7 Years Ago


anonymous_at

7 Years Ago

Well sometimes i like to flow my emotions in bold letters..... I have been oppressed for long time.. read more
Oh dear, you are just 16 and you have written such a strong poem on society with such a serious topic, you amaze me. It was beautifully done. Now I know age doesn't decide what to write and what not, if so called 'society' can name anyone writers have right to write about them. Very strong take on today's Indian scenario. I liked the honesty and rawness in your words.

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

anonymous_at

7 Years Ago

Well thanks a lot...... It's really nice to see that there are people who agree with me.... And i t.. read more
Najam Us Saher

7 Years Ago

We all are people living in a society and getting judged by them. You are welcome :)
anonymous_at

7 Years Ago

Ya... You are right..... :)
First...one punctuation mark per sentence. A row of bangs, which denote shouting, not emotion, don't make capital letters, which do the same thing, any more capital. Let the words express the emotion, not the punctuation.

That aside, I think you're generalizing, and simplifying. You blame the generality: society, for behavior and dress standards, then talk as though it's an entity and that the "rules" are both universal and white and black. But consider a single woman being viewed by four people: a wealthy traditionalist woman, a poverty stricken man, a poet and a rapist. No two of them will see her the same way. Yet all are members of society. Some view her because of cultural differences, and all are influenced by personal taste and goals. As Rufus E. Miles Jr, a bureaucrat with Bureau of the Budget famously said, "Where you stand depends on where you sit."

So while you can truly say that the situations you outline will bring the comment that she is a s**t, it will also bring,"Right on."

Posted 7 Years Ago


anonymous_at

7 Years Ago

Though i like to express my emotions in bold letters..... But i will try to not to do that next tim.. read more
JayG

7 Years Ago

I can see where you're coming from, and the issue you're commenting on. And, I absolutely agree with.. read more
anonymous_at

6 Years Ago

well thanks for your advice.....i'll try to use that type of stats in my poems....:)
i think few girls might find it relatable........but let me make it clear that i had tried to put down my feelings.....and i haven't tried to offend anyone.....hope everyone likes it..... constructive and positive reviews are welcome ....... hope everyone likes it......... :)

Posted 7 Years Ago



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