Living In My Dreams

im so sick of living in this dream

i dont want to do it all over again

the pain circulates in my head it seems

isn't this river supposed to wash away my pain?

i sit here locked inside my own mind

dreaming of her in daily routine

lost in myself im running out of time

crying myself to sleep i see her in my dreams

im so sick of living in this dream

its almost like on the outside she's not real

my heart begins to tear at the seams

if i died would she be the only thing i could feel?

my nails digging deep into my skin

blood flows out from the veins too fast

i'd give anything to feel her touch again

what must i do to make this feeling last?

im so sick of living in this dream

its like the only thing i can do

dreaming of her in daily routine

i cant even function without her...

Reviews

[Destiny]

Very good portrayal of emotion. Helplessness and hopelessness pervades the piece. Also the intensity of these emotions throughout make for a very passionate poem. There is a sense of chaos and racing thoughts that aide in the effect of disorder. I like that the phrase, "im so sick of living in this dream" is repeated. It unifies the piece. I love the level of emotion you brought into this poem. Thanx for writing
♥Destiny ♥

[Vanmoriel]

somethings wrong I gather.